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Another night |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
She might have cried When she stared At the blood-broken skin There Under his ripped shirt The whiskey bottle bleeding In his hand Sweetening the violent air She might have cried Another night Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh so true. This one brings to mind my daughter and her relationship with her horrid husband, One time too many, and the empathy and the love gets turned off. Great poem. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Lothy,...(may I)? Hehe. This little piece of yours speaks a thousand words. My,my. *sigh* Your choice of wording is very impressive. This just made perfect sense and just honestly shows how things end up at times and the effect or lack of that it has on one. WoW!!! Have witnessed a similar situation. I'm thinking this is some pretty profound poetry right here. Love it. *Peace. |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
This is a good peom, expreesed well. No one should have to expirebce situtations like it though. Tis a sad life we live. There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all -Creed |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Uta...Your really nailed this one. I see this all too often...and I see the women trapped in these situations. It's sad. Hardrock |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
my friend this is a great poem i really enjoyed this alot. the way you express the vividness of the game people play and the way we all sometimes get treated. i hope you are ok. Love JJ I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I can so realte!!! Sad thing is I know from experience he brought it all on himself... Great stuff  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
Makes me wonder what she did to him that we should all be applauding for. It is enough, and yet not too much. Another good one. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
wow lothie. you really took me back on this one. i remember the nite my tears stopped coming for his punk ass. excellent work here my friend. as always, your words speak volumes. kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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glidingdove Junior Member
since 2000-07-16
Posts 13 |
Yes - another night - for time changes irrevocably the magic of our lives. Beautiful Poem though sad that that should have happened Abha |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Hi folks! Thanks for all the lovely comments!! And I'm sorry it rang so many bells  , but it was this kind of reality-snapshot I was trying to create.And Jeremiah, thanks for the concern , but fortunately the poem isn't about me.Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
This speaks volumes, and yes a reality snapshot for sure. Excellent work here, and the awful truth...Great job!!! |
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