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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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Trailer sat there Forlorn, disabused Silent Dappled leaves paying homage Thirty aluminum feet Crouched low on dead tires Inviting Crumbling particleboard floors Creak and Complain Hearing the muted screams The slap of leather The slap of leather The slap of leather Echoing down the leaning hall A faded ochre handprint Directs traffic And in the middle Of a ransacked room Visions of splatters Run like honeysuckle Down the walls Like a picture of Maiden and Crone Musty walls Fresh wallpaper Slap of leather Perfunctory screams Splash of crimson Staining the bedding Turning I feel sharp pain Eyes focusing on the Handle merging with me As my blood joins the Gathering flood Among the dappled leaves Paying homage Alicat As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My goodness! Where did you get the inspiration for this dark piece? I like it very much. I really would like to know the story behind it.  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is very good, Persnikitty - it's different from your norm... well.. on second thought, you're a pretty versatile poet, you are... nice job here...  |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
This is sort of gruesome...very visual. Nice description. Hardrock |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is brilliant!!! What descriptive vision you have! I wish you posted here more often! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
"Ahhhhhhhhhh!"(that was a scream of horror, by the way) This poem is grusome! It gave me shivers!(but in a good way) Post here again soon! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Mmmhhmm,...I have to agree,...my head needs more of this. You must return. Vivid and emotionally affecting. (IF that even makes sense). Take care. *Peace. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sharon and Nan, thank you. Both of you I hold in very high esteem for your varied craftsmanship. Hardrock, thanks...gruesome wasn't what I was aiming for...I was just describing an odd dream I had. Lotharingia...interesting name...gotta tell me how ya got that one. I have posted here before...just check the archives and back shelves. Wren, thank you. As soon as I have another bad dream, I will. Spitfire, no problemo. I've basically been in every forum, with the exception of Teen. That would be a bit incongruous, since I'm pushing 30.  Thanks again, guys. It's good to find home no matter where you are. Alicat, the Persnikitty  As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Alicat, since you asked, Lotharingia is German for Lorraine (as in the place). Really deep, huh?  Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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