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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
in death my heart the sun denied you to me in life my smile the moon shone not please touch you sighed the rain was gone parched waiting (wake please) tearless I cried |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Lovin' your style...and as for the poem itself it was great.  In a way I can relate to what you expressed and it made me think which is always a plus. Angel< !signature--> Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 07-11-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Diggin' big time the way that this was written. Portia,...there is just something about your writing that makes me long to hear it read aloud. Wonderful. *Peace. |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
"tearless I cried" WOW, that speaks volumes to me. Very powerful. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
I too enjoy your style Portia..very nice stuff. Hardrock |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Very touching poem... I love the simple imagery! Great poem! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Portia, I also liked the style very much, and the imagery was fantastic. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
Thank you all, very much. The funny thing is, this isn't my normal style at all. I am long winded by nature. This one was really more like a spark that fell upon me rather than one I lit. A lot of my writing is like that lately though. I do appreciate all of your comments and thoughts. Thanks again. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Portia, what a piece! It left me guessing as to your meaning. Are you mourning a lost lover? Or are you asleep and dreaming all of this and wishing to wake? Or are you talking about someone who is unreachable? Or none of the above? Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
It was literally a dream in which I lost someone very close to me. When I woke I was as sad as I had been in the dream. It was very hard to shake. This was the last of it coming out. (argh. This was NOT supposed to be my hundredth post. shriek!) [This message has been edited by Portia (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
I too found the style intriguing and tending to spark thoughts, ideas, connections - very sparse - challenging, wistfull... In your reply you said: "This one was really more like a spark that fell upon me rather than one I lit." That's a lovely way to decribe it. (It also describes how most of my things arrive...) Allan |
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