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Questions on the Plastic Horse |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Questions on the Plastic Horse Can I ask you to ride with me on the plastic horse in circles for the time,... to feel the callous and pain, the swelling and the wet? To feel it the alluminum way. If I run through this place, in fairy tale nightgowns and bare feet, would you feel my fresh breeze, my sweet breath as I pass? Would you recognize my voice, if I were to speak in time? To release and ask after all that waiting. Fear ate me for dinner that night, and I escaped the truth, I escaped finding your answers, and living with the blood, the paint, and peel of wasted people on carpets with cigarette burns. Can I ask if you'd wish for me,...would you reach for me too? Can I ask if you'd know me, if the passing were so brief? Would you make the effort, would you make the ride? The raid and it's timing, the ring and it's swelling. You showed your love with knuckles clenched white. With grips of time and looks of space. You showed your fear with voices cruel; and now, can I ask you to ride with me,... on the plastic horse in circles,... for the time? [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-09-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
What can I say? Wow, And Damn! And magnificent! Could almost talk me into riding on the plastic horse.. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Me again.. Can we please submit this for the book??? |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Cat,...haha, you're too cool. I haven't really submitted any for the book, except the one that SOMEHOW someone else did for me??? Anyway,...thanks for the encouragement. Didn't take much huh? haha. *Peace. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
riding to the voting booth Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
"Fear ate me for dinner that nght" I love this poem! Great Job! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Spitfire, where do you come up this stuff?? Seems like it comes from left field but it's always great and always makes sense...sometimes have to read it 2 or 3 times before it sinks in, but sink in it does. Love your writing. jwesley |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Spitfire, Your writing is very original. I wonder if anyone really does recognise "one's voice"? Well done Deepak |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
SpitFire...what a magnificent mind you have. Remarkable stuff here. Hardrock |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I love poems that asks question. This was complex, in depth, you obviously put a lot of work into it, good job, very good job. Kathleen |
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