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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
When you weren't looking I stole a piece of your heart And hammered it out nice and thin And wound it around my finger. I thought I had opened your eyes They were so bold and beautiful Honest and care-free, just like I always pictured myself as; But time has a way of eroding The shifting sands with its Battlefield of water, be it A flood of tears or rain. Those eyes I loved staring into Weren't opened but shut, nice And tight, you knew it but You let me take that piece of heart. I wish I could say I hate you Maybe that would justify what I feel, but I can't it isn't true And I am not one to tell lies Like You.. So maybe it is you, who is really the thief, the backstabbing, lying, pathetic thief, when I was just wanting; Now what I want you refuse to give and you keep stealing, and you keep pretending and you keep your eyes shut. And me? I am left here, half way between Reality and Hell, tossed upon waves of emotions you've never acknowledged And I am drowning in the pit Of You... *I apologize if this crosses the line of what is exceptable here at Passions. On an emotional overload and needed to voice it. If it offends, I will take out the offending parts or delete it in its entirety.* With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe [This message has been edited by dragonpoe (edited 12-11-2000).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey Poe... hm this doesn't cross any guidelines at all.  If you want to check up on them - to see what is considered appropriate or not, here is the link:/pip/guidelines.htm\ In short though - the types of poetry that are discouraged are ones that glorify suicide, self-violence or violence against others. Or ones that offer these as a solution to emotional problems. Also - graphic violence is often better suited to the adult forum...though it's up to the moderators there to decide if it's appropriate. Also - swearing just isn't a good thing to do, considering the amount of young kids who read here. And slandering other members lol...never a good thing... but deep emotional expression, about hurt and suffering? We're here to listen...and poetry is the perfect vehicle - if there is anything perfect in hurting. Hugs - hope you feel safer sharing this here now. K |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Thanks Severn. I was concerned because of the usuage of "damn", I consider it a mild profanity, but knowing that there are younger readers here, I think I will take that out. Thanks again, With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey - that's cool...I know that damn is indeed considered mild - so that one is up to you entirely lol...  K |
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