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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Sufferance Let your eyes fall upon me, this wretched soul am I And cry your tears of sorrow, for no life resides in me. A shell of hollow crisis, and a mind molded with pain I was once a spirit of good fortune, fallen by no sword; But ‘twas grief that took me in its grip and squeezed My life out of my very being, and left me to rot Within bitter memories and the sweetest of dreams No survivor was I, instead I wilted like the rose Bade the light good-bye and vowed my soul to sleep. Beyond the grave I am a witness to the age of tomorrow And I see you there, standing over me, watching tearfully. Eternal light flares against the night, thankful am I for that Your voice is like a church bell, and I hear it, yes I do! The softest of breezes reaches out to you, it is my hand That touches your face, across your cheek, pale and soft No prayers shall you speak for me, I left your god long ago But spy with quiet awe, for you thought you once knew me And you did, but not as well as I knew you. Let your eyes fall upon me, this wretched soul am I And cry no more tears of regret, for no life resides in me. I am but a shell sitting here, outside the grave I know My spirit wallows in the pit of grief, no escaping I drown; ‘Twas grief that took me in its grip, taloned claw and squeezed With bitter memories and the sweetest of dreams I rot Until I can lay my head upon the stone and bid the light goodbye No survivor am I, instead I wilt like the rose A rose no garden could keep. Joann Renee' Muszynski 11/11/00 |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
What a great poem to welcome you into passions with! The depth of this sorrow has been expressed so well. Thank you for sharing and I look forward to reading more. Sheila |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, welcome to Passions, and thanks for your comments on my poem, also. This poem is very powerful, very sad, and feels like it could say many things. Aswesome first post. (I love your screen name, too) Sandra (catalinamoon) |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Yikes, I felt as if this was a suicide note which would have been written around 1620 or so  I was sooo caught up in this work. It was great reading. It was dark, meaningful, and depressing...I hope indeed you aren't this person right now. I look forward to reading more!Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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ThyWizard Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 56Chambersburg, PA, USA |
Wow. Simply wow. i loved this piece! it was so beautifully written it drew emotion from every part of my body... just incredible...keep writing! " If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown Thy Wizard |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
welcome, joann, this is very beautiful. i loved the last line. i look forward to reading more of your work. jann elizabeth If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them. -1984 |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Masterly lines here DP. Wow to that. Welcome, and keep posting, enjoyed this read much. Heavy and captivating. Take care. *Peace. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Thank you all, for your kind words. I am so happy that I found this site (thanks to jwesley)I love sharing my poetry, but more, I love reading the works of other poets. So far, I have been having a great time getting to know you all by reading your works, and boy! do I have a lot more reading to do!!! Smiles, dragonpoe |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
welcome, this is really beautiful. really moved me... thanks shira |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Welcome to Dark Passions!!! A what a GREAT piece as your first post! I hope to see ALOT more of your work soon.  DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
An age old note of despair written with that olde world quality. I sooo enjoyed this hon. Glad you've joined the ranks and welcome also.. Isis *I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
another good one DP..nicely written.. enjoyed very much..~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
i think I will save this in my library. i feel this is so much a part of my life right now. Each time i read it i either want to scream that someone knows how i feel or cry from the pain of it all. ~Wynter *and welcome,dp your writing touched me deeply. "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Joann, this is a damn fine poem...excellent emotion and imagery... Welcome to the family - and please check your email... KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dragonpoe from allpoets.com? wow, fancy meeting you here(yippee) ...well, it has been long since i have read your works and what a terrific first post to delight my eyes with!!! hmmmm...only one gripe here...you really should post more of your poems, you know...LOL looking forward to catch up with your works and send my regards to queen and i hope her poetry is coming along fine |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Well, hiya kaile! Yep, it is me. It is great to be back in the flow of social poetry. I missed it so much, and I really like this site. I can't wait to read your works. Thanks all for your kind words With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting...James |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
This reads like a great epitaph, I was moved by your sensitivity and skill, a wonderful piece of writing, I enjoyed it. Regards, Olias |
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