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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas 
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The beginning is always the best Full of smiles, laughter and true love Each sun rise is a bright new day As fresh as the beauty of a dove Everything you look at.... Seems to be the best it can be Everything you touch.... Feels as peaceful as you see Your joy over rides the memories Of the pain you once had Your love over rides the thoughts Of the nights that were so bad But why do they end? Making the smiles fade away The laughter is no longer there The thunder rolls throughout your day Things that you once loved Are no longer there The loneliness over comes you Making life hard to bare Is it something I did To make the pain love me Or am I just a lonely fool That others just cant see? |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Great poem kid, I like the mood trends from light to dark. it makes for a great read. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
you have wonderful insight into things life deals us all. keep up the wonderful work.  |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
boy oh boy, is it something i did to make the pain love me....... wow!!!!! that was powerful and hit me to my core. excellent work, dark. makes ya not even want to begin, huh? cuz you know the sad sad end. kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is truely a great work of art from start to finish keep up the good work. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~DKW,...take care of you. This is such a heart touching piece of poetry. You've got some really strong lines in this....well done. *Peace. |
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