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A Touch of Frost
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A Touch of Frost |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I walk through spring's depression deep With miles to go before I sleep I look at lovers hand in hand Must close my eyes before tears creep The daffodils begin to flower Blazing for a golden hour I turn my head and slowly weep To move me beauty has no power When the tepid sunshine warms My weary bones as new day forms Darkness shrouds and bitterness showers I see no glory just shattering storms I close my eyes against the light Panic stricken bowed with fright While I am feeling lost, forlorn The glistening lake, lovers delight Butterflies rest in the air Dart about and hover there All I can think is, crush their wings So, they're matching my despair Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
An awesome piece of work here dearie  loved this part the most : I look at lovers hand in hand Must close my eyes before tears creep CrEaTuRe |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
A finely crafted piece of poetry, enjoyed the read. Gloom |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
K, sounds like you are as down as I am. Great work here, and I know the feelings well. I walked on the beach alone I saw some lovers there. Kissing, so oblivious, it brought me such despair. PS, thanks for the hugs, they are sorely needed these days. Sandra [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Kethry....such a beautiful image you painted here. Glad you shared it. Thanks....Hardrock |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I don't see this rhyme scheme often, and I'm impressed, this is very, very good. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow Kethry *sigh*... you've written this so beautifully... I can relate to some parts of it. Take care. ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
CrEaTuRe, thanks for the "awesome" and the wink. Dr Gloom, Thanks, you are a master at the craft so it's high praise. Cat, hang in there.HuGS Hardrock, welcome back and thanks, you are too kind. Irish Rose, the poem style is based on Robert Frost's "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening" Hence the title, which also seemed to fit the mood taram thanks for stopping by. Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, Frost! One of my favorites, and he wrote this one in a very short time, perfecting it almost instantly. Makes me yearn for snow. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kathleen, He's one of my favourites too, along with Dylan Thomas,Edgar Allen Poe, Robert Burns, just to name a few. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Very emotive, great work! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Eagleone, as always thanks. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I like this. The last verse especialy. Butterflies rest in the air Dart about and hover there All I can think is, crush their wings So, they're matching my despair Joy |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Great poem Kethry, I love Robert Frost's poems and "stopping by woods" is my favourite  Hang in there and take care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Kethry, It has been years since I've read Frost.. so, I can't honestly make technical comparisons!!LOL, but the content here is wonderfully honest, especially the ending lines.. Very well done.. Crakker |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Joy14, thanks. Yeah the last verse sortof finished the poem offf for me. LM, thanks, I am taking care. firecrakker, I wasn't actually expecting anyone to make comparisons with my work to Robert Frost's (as if they could) but I had been reading him and the words of my poem came into my head and matched his form. I really just wanted to acknowledge that the form was his before mine. Thanks for the response. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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