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A Sad Way of Living |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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A Sad Way of Living Shattered glass on the tile floor, petals from a flower blow. The night's cold seeps in to freeze, my heart and tears that hurt me so. The light flickers in the corner, a naked bulb on the window sill. Taking every breath from me, every ounce of life that it will. An empty space to call my home, this is what I've got. Left in the cold with nothing but, my sickness and my rot. A sad way of living, on this floor, with no window, no lampshade, no heat, no you. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
This is ?? hitting home today kid. I don't think I told you that I sleep on the floor did I, I have a perfectly good bedroom that I don't use, I sleep below my fish thank and now between my bird to. and yes it gets cold there, but it would be colder in the room without my W. D. thanks for a good Sun. Morn, read Kid. haha love ya. Joel.< !signature--> I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. [This message has been edited by Joel the wolf (edited 06-25-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~How did this become a book??? submission,..if I did not do it??? HHHmmmm. ~Joel,..I know exactly what you are saying about not using the bedroom,...that hurts, but I can see it all. Can see why,...and have felt like that before myself. Thank you for reading. *Peace. |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Dear SpitFire You're right. This IS sad! A beautifully sad and majestically poetic piece. I feel for you my friend. *Hugs* Sylvia |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
What a great image for a video!!! I could feel the cold tile...smell the petals....This is an outstanding piece of work SpitFire....I agree, book material it is. Hardrock |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Look at the bright side! If you're on the floor you can't fall out of the bed! Pretend the light is a strobe and you're having a party with me. Well! That naked bulb! I'll keep my eyes closed. I'll help you breath better? We'll order in too! ___________________ This little space Our very own place What else do we need Just love to succeed If the bulb loses light A candle makes the mood right ___________________ You got a match? Another excellent poem you did. I felt as if I was there in that place! But sad! You got a match? I'm gonna vote that you have a candle too!  See you on the quarter-pipe! |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
oh, wow---the last few lines just hit me in the face when I read them. "no lampshade/no heat/no you" so painfully beautiful. I like the physical setup of the poem itself, how it dwindles down into a few short words then ends. I like. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a very good piece from you. i just had to vote for it. but i'm still young i have not been here to these points yet in the ways many of you have. but great piece. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Thank you all so much,....really. Although I still have NO IDEA how this became a book submission???? Anyway,...you folks are the best. Love ya. Thank you for reading. OH and Insect's idea about the flickering light being a strobe light and having a party,.....RIGHT ON!!! Love it...much better than what was going on before. Take care all. *Peace. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i got a candle if you got a match, who needs electricity when you got friends like that!!! this is sooooo good, firebean. and as usual, you rip it from my memory banks!!! kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I've been trying to find the right words to describe how this one feels to me, I think haunting would best describe it. Great work as always! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF, My friend you know you are never alone. This was powerful and what an image you have drawn for us. Loved it. Good one. LW Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This caught my eye and then captured my heart...so brooding...and makes me appreciate my couch muchly...very moving piece spitfire... |
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tac Junior Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 28New Jersey |
A Sad way of living indead... But it is oh so comforting to go back there, no one can hurt you if you just stay by yourself "...The darkness is comfortable, I'm used to it now afraid to let go I slip back there again there is something about it, I'm addicted to the pain..." |
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