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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Giving In What once was my desire my deep burn of passion fire rests now in winds of wake ashes of memories all will forsake Tides of purity in moonlit care swept away for all the world to share innocense lost in this lonesome night one more time will not make it right Tempos with angels given to chance looking for that lover's dance that so eluded me in chambered walls lost forever in yesterdays halls One more ride to set me free one last kiss and then let it be upon this midnight's birth to come lifetime's lonliness I now succcumb No passage to paths of gold No more tickets to love to be sold Melting against the heat within Rest now for I am giving in Mark Bohannan |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
It's so beautiful, I'm totally speachless... Wonderful work, I enjoyed it a lot. Take Care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* The heaviness of this piece is felt deeply...each line added a tear ending with a tidal wave. I'm so sorry to see this kind of pain in your heart...excellent expression from your pen and soul. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--you have expressed so much anguish in this excellent poem...very well written, my friend...Hearts that give so much to love feel pain deeply as well as joy...hugs! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
no more talk of giving up ... or giving in all things meant to be ... will allow you to love again somtimes we have to let go to ... to truly hold on sometimes we must walk in the darkness ... before we dance in the dawn as long as I am on this earth ... you'll not be lost in loneliness ... on our friendship you can depend ... always believe in you and this ****** Mark, you need only to see your self thru our eyes... and then simply believe ... fate destiny and the powers that be ...will make all our paths be known in time ... you express your pain with the same eloquence and depth of emotion and beauty that you express your love.. and you touch deep with this one, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Forsake not thy lonely heart passionate fires shall impart and succumb naught to lonely nights but wry smile under starshine bright and look yet upon ‘morrow’s day ‘twill come to thee, that which may… Ah Mark, I'd rather see you chasing butterflies...'tis heaviness in your heart, indeed, that is seen here... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend this is utterly awesome, such a beautiful poem. You know I love this of course, because all your poems I adore. This one has something a bit extra, it is utterly perfect, I'm speachless truly. Marsha  |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
Love your work here, I felt!! Have you ever heard enya ? "On Your Shore" You've got a blossom, and roses can bloom year-round. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Mark, this absolutely aches...and it's written so well. Hugs  K |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I can hear the sadness in this poem. Yes you may feel like you need to "rest now"...but it is only so you can regain your strength to Love again.{{hugs}} |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Thank you all very much and I WILL get back to replying and writing as normal so please do forgive my lack of response during this brief transition in my life. I hope you all know that I appreciate you. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I'm sad that you feel this pain Mark. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Heartfelt Mark..nicely written.. A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is lovely, Mark, very nice one here. Kathleen |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
mark, you use words like a paintbrush. this is wonderful poetry here. i liked these lines: "Tides of purity in moonlit care swept away for all the world to share innocense lost in this lonesome night one more time will not make it right" the whole thing reminded me of a Hootie song... "let her cry, if the tears fall down like rain. let her sing, if it eases all her pain. let her go, let her walk right out on me. and if the sun comes up tomorrow, let her be." good stuff here. i'm glad i popped in here. I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?" |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I have not been in Dark in awhile, and I come here to find this sad poem from my favourite Cowboy. What can I say here Mark??? So many words come to mind, but I think I might just be best to say......... HUGS!!!!!!!!!!! My arms are always open, my friend. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Mark, I had to read this again, I just adore it. Kathleen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh Mark, don't tell me, you too? What is it that makes real love so impossible for us? This is a perfect poem, expresses my feelings in every way. Please read mine, I could use some support. from the heartbroken... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Mark ~~~ < !signature-->I can only echo what those above me have said, and add that I truly hope that you don't ever give in.......... Follow your dream! [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Tempos with angels given to chance looking for that lover's dance that so eluded me in chambered walls lost forever in yesterdays halls I found this one and have dug it up as it's one treasure of a read I've touched upon... Exquisite! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am of the mind that sometimes we have to feel this pain in order to absolutely wallow in the joy when it does come  Nicely done Mark, dusting of shelves in here as I was sort of missing your work. Happy Summer to you. |
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