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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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What do you do when you're fifteen years old and the boy that you love knocks you out cold then leaves you? What do you do when you've turned seventeen not in the running for homecoming queen, instead you're with child? What do you do when after a fight you go back to make it alright and find he's dead. What if police tell you he died by the needle crucified and he meant it? What if his mother fights with her power to take the possessions, that make mem'ries flower and leaves you bereft? What if the courts won't allow you his name so that the child you bear has the emblem of shame for the love you had? What if at eighteen you share love again only to find he has secret pain that he won't share? What if at nineteen he too dies. and you find no peace in platitudes, lies so you go on alone? What if the things that you hold dear are also the things, which cause shedding tears to touch your heart? What if your family won't understand the need for true love in the hand of a man to make you whole? What if each lover turns out to be looking for a mother and not seeing thee as you blend in? What if alone you're destined to be sharing your life, your mystery with only your son? How do you cope, manage each day when you've lost hope, it's drifted away but still there's desire? |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Oh Kethry, this is packed full of emotions, and those unanswered questions, the whats, and whys of life. I could feel alot of pain and uncertainty here. You expressed this all too well. Teriffic job!!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
this is so beautiful, sometimes life just seems to keep throwing more and more junk at us. you have a great talent in showing your emotions. this poem just makes me hope for a simple life, but eventually, life gets everyone. keep up the beatuiful work.  EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Powerful emotions well expressed. The questions may change but the answers are always difficult to find, but that doesn't mean you should stop looking! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
To Deborah1-thanks so much for your kind thoughts. ToDJLI-yes sometimes I have so much emotional junk thrown at me I have to have a peotry garage sale. Thanks for allowing me to do that at Passions. To EagleOne- Yes the questions do change and sometimes by the time we've found the answers we've moved on but the journey is awlays interesting. Be well everyone Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Wow, this is a really fantastic piece with many questions we should all think about. I DO hope it isn't about you, though! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks Lotharingia, No it isn't about me it's about my daughter who seems to be getting her life back together, with the help of my beautiful grandson. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
Wonderful read...I enjoyed it very much. I hope you daughter finds true love soon. Dee "It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Kethry, we should talk about our daughters, what a tough journey they have, and it hurts as though it was our own, doesn't it? Very expresive piece. Catalinamoon / Sandra |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Kethry~~Woderful work! My daughter is sixteen, and going through som tough times right now. I'm glad to hear Your daughter is doing better now. We as parents can only hope and pray for them. Take Care. ~Sash~ |
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ThyWizard Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 56Chambersburg, PA, USA |
Kethry, Wow, that was an incredible poem. I really enjoyed reading it, it was so powerful in so many different ways and it honestly had me wondering What if about some of those things involving death... thanx for sharing this with us! Thy Wizard " If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Kethry,...your words here,...have deeply touched me. Right inside. Where it counts. Ouch. Hug. Expressed well. Take care. *Peace. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I don't have a daughter. In fact I am one myself, and still young. I'm not comparing myself to your daughter, but I have many trials and such that haven't been fair for a 17 year old, I understand pain, and usually men, and the fact that we're too trusting is our downfall. Good work!- Jenn |
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jerralynne Junior Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 11 |
your words questions are so powerful ~ the kind you feel in the pit of your stomach ~ as a health teacher i see my students struggle with so many "what if's" out there ~ the real world can be scary & escaping from it can be even scarier ~ thank you for touching me & your audience with such universal compassion & reminding me of the struggles every people go through ~ jerralynne |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Kethry...this is simply stunning. A lifetime displayed right here, for all to see. The content is like a bad dream, but the poem is beyond words. You have outdone yourself here. Hardrock |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You've revealed lots of compassion in these words. So many obsticles and suffering. Hope the next 100 years is better...James |
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