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Click
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-08-02 10:29 PM



Looking in the mirror,
I see the empty eyes.
With a hint of madness,
that I tend to despise.

If you were to look inside,     of this hollow shell.
You would see the things,
that I know all too well.

Lying at the bottom,
of the empty soul.
is the damage wreaked,
by demons out of control.

Moving on in spite,
of the mortal wound.
Not able to belive,
it will be ending soon.

Pushing past the point,
of anything that is sane.
Knowing only it loves you,
calling out your name.

One more breath,one more step.
I continue on.
only then I'll stop,
when all hope is gone.


Click



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sash
Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125

1 posted 2000-08-02 10:53 PM


Well written! Emotional turmoil sometimes makes us into someone we just are'nt real happy to see. In the mirror, or anywhere else for that matter....You'll come through this with flying colors! I have all the faith in the world in ya!
Take care friend...

        ~Sash~



catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-08-02 11:22 PM


Powerful poem, I hope you are not this sad inside. Take care.
Cat...

MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
3 posted 2000-08-03 12:29 PM


hey! pleeeaaaaseeee feel better! if u are really feeling this way...you can do it!
and also great poem! i liked how it was flowing...much love~
MiSeRyDivine~~


All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith
Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197
Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A.
4 posted 2000-08-03 12:37 PM


Very well expressed in this piece is the emptiness we all feel inside on occasion. Nicely done.
Also, vacuum is one of my favorite words(it has two Us in a row!)


Sing while you may
-The Prophet Q'spel


Your pain is for you alone
As it is
As it was
As it will be forever
Amen
-The Prophet Q'spel

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-08-03 02:27 AM


Click, this is brilliant.  

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
6 posted 2000-08-25 11:46 AM


your words are a vacuum to me, they suck me in and all i want to do is read.  excellent work, my friend.

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

7 posted 2000-08-25 06:27 PM


Wow, this is great!
Hope your mood improves...

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