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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Too soon to feel, my bleeding heart, if I can love again To see if passion, beyond tears will triumph over pain. To soon to know, my battered mind, if grief will still my pride And I unquestioning become a still small voice inside. Too soon to see, my aching eyes, the glory or the bliss To sense the beauty of the skies, beyond this blind abyss. Too soon to tell my downcast mouth, if I can shout out praise And take a fragment of your joy to help me all my days. Too soon to hear the words of grace, that plummet on my mind To hear beyond the callous grief, that makes me deaf and blind. Too soon to live victorious, to know the joy of peace I'll look for other ways of calm, and seek a sweet release. Too soon to feel, my bleeding heart, if I can take the pain Cocooned in shock how much of me, will later still remain. Too soon to tell if I survive and go on without you Too soon to know, too soon to tell, too soon I say, too soon. Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
wwhhhhooooo wwwhhhheeeeee this is one heckuva piece of work here. wow... takes my breath away. thank you for showing me i am not the only one. kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Kethry, this is awesome, powerful, touching, I feel it in my bones.. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Kethry, this is truly a remarkable piece on those reflecting moments we have. I hope its not "Too Soon" to tell you..You will see sunshine after the rain!! A great job here!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
what a fabulous work of art this is! ah i hope you overcome your pain..but it does make for a very lovely poem! |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
such a sad piece.. but i guess, in life, we just have to wait and see.. who knows, healing is on the way.. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Kethry...This is wonderful. The expression of emotion is exactly on target. Great poem. Hardrock |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like the way you have described the feelings we feel between experiencing a broken heart and finding a new love...James |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Kethry,...this is so great. Not that you were hurt and feel that maybe it's too soon of course, but this writing. Gosh, it just read so nicely. It went along and took me through every aspect of it. Too soon...hhm, well, perhaps it may feel like that but maybe allowing something of a lighter source in will aid in the healing. Great writing. Take care now. *Peace. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This was a beautiful piece of work, both in rhyming and in it's content. Your repetition of "too soon" did not get annoying, but helped convey an anxious quality in this poem. Good work. |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
That one even can ponder timing is progress... Too soon to see, my aching eyes, the glory or the bliss To sense the beauty of the skies, beyond this blind abyss. Wonderful line in a very good poem. Thank you for the read, Evan With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Ditto to all the above. Fantastic! And if it is about you, of course things will get better!  Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Thanks for your comments everyone. It is about me sort of. I wrote it after my best friend died in a car accident last year. I was feeling pretty bad at the time buts it's all better now lol. Kethry Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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