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Graffiti in Red |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Graffiti in Red Restless eyes in perpetual gaze, Defaced in an everlasting daze Fell upon a hanging graffiti in red "You Are Here", which read. Wandering thoughts came to rest Abruptly upon that single line in red "Where's here?" asked the guests, Mind feeling an uncertain dread Was I really lost or did I feel lost? Whatever made me feel that way! And the music played to its cost Sounded like the end of that day. Another coin jingled its way into the slot And Nirvana sang 'Come As You Are' While demonic thoughts began their plot Said they "this time you've come too far" Reread the sign in red "You Are Here" Ghosts wandered in question mode I wished love was somewhere near Instead of being farther down-road. I closed my eyes, head spinning This felt to be just the beginning, This cowboy had a long way to go Nothing to tell to no one he knows No soul to bare this heart's care All alone in this wide world's fair, The graffiti read, "You are here" While it actually felt like nowhere! ~ Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
This is the first of yours I think I have read. This is very creative, and says alot!!! Hope to see more!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Deborah, I am more of a wanderer... a tramp... and post in many forums... mostly in Open forums... but I tend to come here once in a while... just to retain the feel... Thanks for coming in on this one... regards, sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sudhir, I love this piece...had a spacey feel to it, like many times in my life, LOL...but you captured the essence beautifully, of a moment in time, when you can step outside of yourself and see...wonderful! oh yes..and Grafitti? when I went to UNO--my favorite was---"Question Everything", under that someone else had written--"Why?" So I leave you with that and a hug too. Smile. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Sudhir, It would be nice if you posted here more often!  I really enjoyed the mix of reality and confusion in this piece, confusion being part of reality, after all. Where's here? and here feeling like nowhere. I fear I am rambling again! "Very well done!" is what I wanted to say. I also liked the line: Restless eyes in perpetual gaze very much! Hope to see you again soon Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This was a fascinating poem, the feel of it was very real, I could touch the confusion..(I live the confusion) I'd like to see more of your work here also. Catalinamoon |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
How often I have looked at where I am and wondered "where is here?" and if I move am I "hear" or "there" ? see you got me trying to be profound. I get a feeling from this poem of being a traveller in a foreign place where he does not fit in. That he is not quite there because the place does not accept him. JUst a vibe I got. Maybe i am reading it call wrong. But that is just the very strong vibe I got. An excellent piece. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Sudhir,...where do I begin? This is so me everyday...asking where is here, and thinking maybe here is nowhere...etc. I fell in love with this piece of your work. I felt myself wandering inside it's creativity and masses of unknown. Do keep them coming. Be well SI. *Peace. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Sudhir, this is a wonderful piece you have penned here. Don't we all walk in a state of confusion at some point in our lives? I know I certainly do. Enjoyed the read. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Serenity... Thanks a lot... the smile the hug and the graffiti bit too.. and most of them for your wonderful reply... Lotharingia, I hope to be here soon too... its difficult to post in many forums, but I try to be objective, first have a poem and then decide where to post it... I guess thats the most correct way, if there is one... Thanks for your appreciative words... Catalinamoon, Thanks and I hope to be here soon enough... Brian, in your way of thinking it all fits in perfectly... but there are more ways to interpret this... imagine a lost lover... or maybe imagine a reclusive drunkard in a pub, or maybe even imagine a man in Antarctica where he sees a hoarding by Pepsi or Coke that says  "You are Here" ... see how the mind can travel... I am with you my friend traveller... Thanks a lotSpitFire, your words have affected me ... Thanks Eloise, I am so glad that you enjoyed... Thanks regards, sudhir < !signature--> You stood there screaming, fearing no one was listening to you They say the empty can rattles the most, the sound of your voice must soothe you ~ Metallica [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sudhir, I'm sitting here kind of speechless, thinking, WOW, that was really incredible. It brought all kinds of emotions in me. Very very well done. Best wishes, Juls |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Juliet, Your WOW has indeed gladdened me a lot... and the rest of your sweet response has left me in a daze... Thanks a lot...regards, sudhir |
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