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pyro Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 12 |
deepest dark secrets, whispered in my ear... the numbness creeps in-come my dear; awake the first sharp thrill of fear mad, wild laughter, ringing clear... come,my sweetest, here-come near hide behind the velvet night submit to chilling colds sharp bite enveloped by it's flowing dark... thick like honey, black as death danger, with each silent breath, draws closer, and a single tear slides down one cheek, but none to hear and none to see, the silent screams of pain in psychedelic dreams the broken, shattered mind is lost, and only thoughts of death adhere all else blocked out by blinding pain, and only thoughts of death remain. pyro (15) |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
How dark can you go my friend, haha this is great. I love this part. come,my sweetest, here-come near hide behind the velvet night submit to chilling colds sharp bite It puts a chill. great. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great poem. funny tho Pyro is my brothers tag name to. because his hair is died like fire. keep up the work and i'll keep reading. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is a great portrayal of depression. Much of my family has suffered from it. Very good imagery. We are the hollow men We are the stuffed men Leaning together Headpiece filled with straw. Alas! Our dried voices, when We whisper together Are quiet and meaningless As wind in dry grass Or rats' feet over broken glass In our dry cellar Shape without form, shade without color, Paralyzed force, gesture without motion; --T.S. Eliot |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You hit the nail on the head with this one and your descriptions of depression great work!!  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
As isis says before.......you hit the nail on the head.ouch. And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Ohhhh Yeahhhh!!!! The dark abyss of depression....It's a long way back to the light. Great work Pyro. Hardrock |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
this is perfect in its pain. i love this. excellent work . very raw and very close to you, i feel. kynder A woman to a man is But a mere chapter, But a man to a woman Is an entire book.-- Kynder Howell |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Dark is right!!! I LIKE IT!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This was intense, almost Poe like. Sandra |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Ooooeeee!!! Now this is descriptively dark poetry. Mmmm,...I like it, I like it. hehe. *Peace. |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
I liked it there. And visit it sometimes. When life is barren of happiness bell-chimes. |
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