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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
it's that very second when she opens her eyes and stares lovingly back into the ones that have adored her all night it's that very moment that you both know what the other is going to say, yet speak no words it's that very instant you can feel no ending, no beginning, no idea where it's all coming from, and then the eyes spill it's that very first time you saw her cry, held back the tears, and knew something special was born it's that very personal time you held yourself, wished for the best, prayed for the chance, and the eyes engulfed you it's that very smell that reminds you, of times loved, of times lost, and the very presence it's that very chance that the feeling is mutual, the sparkles are true, and the thoughts are inline it's that very glimpse seen together of the same stars, the same future, and the awe of beauty within it's that very chance that you might meet again, that you have always been together, and that something might last forever it's that very strange empty feeling, the loss within, and the thought of live's lived within eachother it's that very thought that life and love are not so simplified, that you have both given all you could it's that very smile that appears on our face, that seems to wrap around between eachother together it's that very thought that scares us beyond all understanding, within some strange looping situations, without the usual it's that very interesting look in someones eyes, that again makes us wonder, without eachother it's that very thing that might drive us crazy, or deeper within, maybe just lost it's that very simple chance that we might understand eachother completely J.L.Koehler Please send some feedback on this, it is the first I've written in days, and I'm beginning to think I've used up all of my worth. Even if you don't like it, please let me know everything. |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
I really enjoyed this poem there is always new beginings in new and old relationships.We constantly travel through new feelings and emotions. This is how I took your poem. again I really enjoyed your piece Blue |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Carolina, I get stuck too on writing sometimes, lately I haven't done too much...Anyways please keep going, this was full of emotions and comparisons, and I loved it!! Hope to see more!!! Deb1 The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Carolina. I'm new at this so bear with me. I liked the way it looped back on itself forming a perfect image of infinity. I liked the mundane turned to magic the ordinary to the extraordinary. I liked the way it flowed. What I didn't like was...Um nothing. Cheers Kethry Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
J.L. There is NOTHING wrong with this poem. The creative juices are obviously still brewing within you. Beautifully done. Hardrock |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful CD, but you always had a way with words. Isis |
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