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The Inevitable March of Time |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Inevitable March of Time A certain gray quality to that morning pressed into my skin held my steps back prevented the perfect breath. If only I could put out my foot and detain the stars I could feel it hitch there in my throat but, of course, I had to breathe. I couldn't just decide that today I didn't like the quality of the air and choose not to. and stop the the breath of morning The car whined purred then choked, a living thing, cohort companion in this agony of breathing. but there is only movement forward She beside me, red hair corking out the window disturbing the air with exuberance its fiery threads. She knew the way into this place, her story was locked my gaze not shifting her stillness into telling. I can’t lock the door of time Into the noisy faces and the congestion of smells like ripe sewage leaking into the air cried a baby and the poverty of children's faces insisted as we squeezed past brightly colored pedestrians. or freeze the noisome crowd I followed her to the cracked corner, past the swollen silent buildings past the glass tomb store fronts her freckled long fingers had trapped the beige flutter of mine pulling me into the inevitable march of time |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Martie..what an absolutely beautiful piece of writing here!! Vivid imagery. Hardrock |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Martie, this was really beautiful. Enjoyed it very much. Juls |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Martie, an incredible poem, complex and interesting. Catalinamoon |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ No matter where I find you ... I find YOU ! My friend - another piece of brilliance !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Into the noisy faces and the congestion of smells like ripe sewage leaking into the air cried a baby and the poverty of children's faces insisted as we squeezed past brightly colored pedestrians. or freeze the noisome crowd I followed her to the cracked corner, past the swollen silent buildings past the glass tomb store fronts her freckled long fingers had trapped the beige flutter of mine pulling me into the inevitable march of time wow excellent piece Martie. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hardrock--thank you for such a sweet reply...I've not posted to DP for a long time..have been enjoying your poetry also. Juliet--I'm so glad you enjoyed...thank you for letting me know catalinamoon--What a wonderful reply, thank you! Marge--Wherever I am, that's where I am...LOL Love your comment, and you! Brian--You are an excellent poet, your opinion means alot to me. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A certain gray quality to that morning pressed into my skin held my steps back prevented the perfect breath. If only I could put out my foot and detain the stars I could feel it hitch there in my throat but, of course, I had to breathe. I couldn't just decide that today I didn't like the quality of the air and choose not to. and stop the the breath of morning I followed her to the cracked corner, past the swollen silent buildings past the glass tomb store fronts her freckled long fingers had trapped the beige flutter of mine pulling me into the inevitable march of time I do so love the way you tie things together. Your vision to see into the burdens of life are overwhelming. Great read my friend. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I am almost never in here, but I was surprised to see your post. This is exceptional writing Martie.......well done!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Mark--Thanks for reading this...actually it's a revision of a poem I posted here when I first joined Passions. It got no replies that time. Marina--I haven't posted to this forum for quite awhile...I'm glad you stopped by and read my poem. Thanks for the sweet reply. |
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