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300 Yards To A Kiss - repost from P-in-P
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300 Yards To A Kiss - repost from P-in-P |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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This is a repost from Passions in Prose as I have received many e-mails stating that for some unknown reason they are not able to post replies without getting kick off line. So upon request I am putting it here. It is somewhat long so I warn you in advance. It is from what I have been told sort of a poetic prose....whatever that is. Three Hundred Yards To A Kiss Shhh.... listen... just beyond the spattering of trees. Natures static of hissing as one wave after another pummels upon the fragile beach. Beyond this broken path of torn away soil is where we shall be treated to the symphony of salten orchestras. Come join me...... pay attention to all around. The shading of shadows distorting all hidden traced blessings of wonder. The blades of bermuda pressing against the soils of time from tramplings of those before us as they too sought the silence of the night.Twigs of promise piercing through forgotten remains of life giving cycles. Silvery gray clouds of moss growing their communities of tomorrows forces..... searching for the darkened shelters with tenacity and poise. Aromatic seasonings of wild mint flavoring the gentle breezes; kissing us with tenderness as we step withing their realm. Broken traces of moonlit guidance flashing before our eyes between the pitter and the patter of serrated prancings within the textured shells of maples and splaying burst of long leaf pines. Through this corridor of yesterdays turmoils just a hundred yards away rest all the promises of tomorrows surrendering plight. White sands of glass sparkling to the cadence of twilights stars as they lend sunken cushions under the weight of our feet. One hundred yards of dancing beneath us to the moistured kisses of each passing breach of foaming passion. Silent sizzles of millions of bubbles bursting in the air as they roll across the pebbled sand. Scalloped remains of the oceans depths scattered aimlessly across the shore and neddle size wells being dug as the sand crab searches refuge from the sandpipers hunt. Just beyond the break of surf scoots the base of billowing sails. The bow slicing the blue worlds of unforgiving seas as the white caps of surrender break free of the battered fortress of watery protection curling in fear as they are cast aside. Just one hundred yards more to the green silkend rock standing firm against the onslaught of harrassing waves. Hermit crabs standing guard as they lose ground with each barrage of angry crests and recapturing what they can within the momentary retreat. This is where we begin our lovers life; in silence we look deep in each others eyes amidst the peaceful silence of natures wars. We kiss............. Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-13-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mark, This is an amazing piece, every single line is poetry at its best. I can't even choose a favorite phrase, they are all so wonderful. All I can say is that it wasn't long enough. I could have read on and on. Your talents as a writer are certainly proven in this work. You are very talented indeed. I am in awe Liz |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
This is absolutly fabulous, this is poetry at it's best. Each word flows beautifully into the next, and then the next. Pulling you on a journey of wonderment! You know I like your work this is something else, it's beyond words! Well it's beyond my ability.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ I KNEW I WAS RIGHT ! I JUST KNEW IT ! Now I can tell you that those little [ thingies ] do make a difference and I'll drop Ron a note about it. As I've been trying to tell you for two day ...... I love this beautiful poetic-prose ... how very lovely are the thoughts from your pen. Most enjoyable, my friend. I'd like to see you do more of it for sure. YEAH ! IT WORKED ! Thanks, cowboy !  You made one lady smile this day ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well now...lets see here... I read this (twice) when you sent it to me then again in prose and again now... so according to my calculations..that means I have walked 1200 miles to get this kiss... whats my reward  LOL(and dont say the kiss) (hehe) you already know how I feel about this prose effort... I dont know if its prose or poetry... there seems to be a dispute here... all I know is you have gift for this descriptive imagery, and detailed beautiful writing.. and I hope you will keep discovering it and developing it... that way I can say I told you so..some more  later-artist-with your pen-gator me |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Liz-Your replies are as lovely as your poems and both show just how special you are. For YOU to say that I left you in awe is the biggest compliment I could receive. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Marsha-no need for words...your quiet enjoyment thrills me to death. Thank you so very much. Marge-my dear sweet lady.....the things you must do to travel even the simplest paths.lol You are so loving to stick with it and I thank you so very much for your persistance and for allowing me the opportunity to please you and there WILL be more. JM-my sweet among sweets......hows about I carry you the other 4800 yards to OUR cabin and give you all that comes from our kisses we share. Would that be enough...? You can say "YOU TOLD ME SO " all you want as long as you keep whispering them in my ear each and every morn we share.  [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-13-2000).] |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
Hey,Mark from one poet to another lovely poem, Hugs to you, Your sister Cathy |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mark... You took my heart and my breath away with this one!!! How I love the sea, and all the life surrounding it. I grew up on the beach, still live on the coast, and don't think I'll ever tire of walking barefoot in the surf and sand! What a beautiful work this is, and what a special kiss that must have been!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Mark ... this simply sings ... so picturesque! The words blended within my mind to form a soothing and beautiful symphony of images. Stunning! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sunny1-Hope you find your breath soon...and as for the kiss...wellllll...I'm just not gonna tell.haha Thank you so much for your sweet replies. Kit-Always glad to sooth a tender heart such as yours with whatever music I can. Thank you sincerely for your kindness. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Denise-The cross can be of wood or vegetation and sometimes just an outline of shingles or such. It is worth the quest as when you find it, you will never look at the print in the same way again. You will look with much more inspiration. Good luck. I hope the two clues helped. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks, Mark, you've narrowed my focus a bit! I'll let you know when I find it! Beautiful, breathtaking poem, Mark! Denise |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
All I can say is this is simply awesome... Deb BloomingRose |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Now this is color! Just when I thought I knew them all you go and invent another one! I hate to admitt, I am not quite sure what a poetic prose is BUT what I do know forsure is all that I read of you is "PERFECT POETIC PLEASURE!!" Each line just flows into the next, and the next, and the next.....so descriptive. Bringing the life of nature alive in us....but the end, melt my already melted heart...you are oblivious to it all and just lost in each other, in that moment....and the last two words "We kiss"....sighs... As for the kiss, not much more needs to be said, as you have said it all. BUT, I do agree with Sunny1, what a kiss it must have been......... Jenn E |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh man! I am impressed! Wow! What a talent you have for this type of writing...you just took me on a wonderful trip and I enjoyed every precious phase of it... Mark I think Janet would be worth the carry. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Denise-glad to have helped and thanks much I like it when I take someones breath away Deb-more than enough believe me....thank you dearly; Jenn E-mind if I carry you around for my ego.LOL You are far far too sweet. As for poetic-prose....I hate to admit it but I don't really know myself....that one is still being defined....I guess....and now I get to listen to more I told you so's from me sweet.LOL Thank you for sending me to the heavens with your reply. Ethome-for you to say that I impressed you is the compliment of compliments...your writing is far superior to mine as I see it and I thank you from the depths of my heart.....and yes, you are right....she is more than worth it. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Wow Mark, I'm just stunned. This is really something. Beauty, grace, romance all rolled into one. What a treasure. Juls |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Juls- I am going to go and let my head shrink back to normal. Thanks so much for all your wonderful replies. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Are You Kidding????? "some unknown reason" How about this is outstanding, fantastic, extraordinary, phenomenal, I could go on but I loaned by Thesaurus to a friend!!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ladysixstring---You are far too kind there lady but please dont let me stop you. I thank you much for one of the most thunderous responses to one of my posts. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-20-2000).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Mark--Just tuning in late to this post in poetry...I loved it as poetry, prose...whatever...words that carry such sweet and treasure filled imagery...that my heart now lies buried in the sand....so dig it out, will ya, the tide is coming in. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Hi Mark, It seems I'm following you around Passions today You have written a memorable piece of work here, call it what you will. Thanks for reposting it, it's wonderful Linda M. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Honing your work suits you, and the subject matter! Well done! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Martie-I am digging as fast as I can...just trying to be gentleman like in doing so. ..Thank you so much. Linda-I am just trying to figure out is leading and who is following.lol...Thank you so much for your kindness. Karilea-As long as it suits you the reader as well. Thank you much. |
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