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Steve B
Member

since 2000-08-07

Posts 140
Southern PA

0 posted 2000-08-11 05:57 PM

Betrayed

That thy Siren's potion engaged my soul,
Thus weakening mine will, sight, and good sense,
Leaving me no defense, mine heart thou stole.
Had intent been of truest love intense,
Mine heart and soul wouldst bound in praise of thee.
O, how I wish upon wish this were true.
That thou spell hold mine heart or just love be,
That which hath bound me forever to you.
Matters not, in mine torment, thou doth leave.
Mine love and trust thou forsook and betrayed.
O, such pain thou inflict with hate's decieve,
Into mine heart, thou thrust thy keenest blade.
While all other pains of past, scream of woe,
The loss of thee shadows those, so I go.

Steve B
fin 2000

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

1 posted 2000-08-11 06:09 PM

This poem you've penned has no curves it speaks straight into the heart of a love that hurt.

"While all the pains of the past speak of woe, the loss of thee shadows those so I go" .. this verse strikes my heart =)

Good reading here
Coco

Artistic
Member

since 2000-08-09

Posts 107
Colorado/Rochester, NY

2 posted 2000-08-11 08:27 PM

Steve-

So beautifully and well written!!

'Leaving me no defense, mine heart thou stole.'

How true that line is... I love it!

~Artistic~

"Dreams are the touchstones of our characters"
-Henry David Thoreau

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

3 posted 2000-08-11 08:38 PM

"While all other pains of past, scream of woe,
The loss of thee shadows those, so I go."

I so enjoyed this...loved your archaic discourse. Bitter and lovely, through and through.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Jenn E
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada

4 posted 2000-08-12 03:39 AM

This was bitter sweet.....so well written. A little Shakespere in all of us......very unique in your wording...I liked it!

Jenn E

Steve B
Member

since 2000-08-07

Posts 140
Southern PA

5 posted 2000-08-13 05:52 PM

Coco ~ thank you for your thoughts and time,

Steve B

Artistic ~ Yess, all to true indeed,, Thanks
for you time and kind words.

Steve B

Claire ~ I do enjoy olde english, it
expresses truth well I think...
your words make me smile.

Steve B

Jenn E ~ I thank thee kindly for thy words,
thou doth honour mine so..

Steve B

MMoonchild
Senior Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

6 posted 2000-08-13 06:03 PM

Guess I was born to Betray....sad thought isn't it
~~sadly reading
M

Steve B
Member

since 2000-08-07

Posts 140
Southern PA

7 posted 2000-08-13 08:26 PM

Maureen ~ if that is what you believe,then it
is so very sad, for we know it is
not true..he waits..

E

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