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Go Ahead............HURT ME!
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Go Ahead............HURT ME! |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Years put into friendships giving all of you sharing deepest emotions entrusted to be true Marrige starts to founder and slowly seperates now you see their colors black, and filled with hate One then puts the knife in your back as everyone takes a slice the hurt that you feel, undescribable I know, I have paid their price Go ahead and hurt me See how much I can take Try a little harder... Until I finally break? They have no remorse for deception as they gather in their faction As I am one and they are many getting pleasure from my reaction You will never break me I am stronger then concluded So try a little harder... Your deceit will be alluded The circle of life is turning right in your direction all that you give, will come back of that, there is no protection. Jenn E [This message has been edited by Jenn E (edited 08-12-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You will never break me I am stronger then concluded So try a little harder... Your deceit will be alluded The circle of life is turning right in your direction all that you give, will come back of that, there is no protection. I'm in a stunned silence a the moment...which is rare! JennE this is so powerful and moving, your strength screams out in this and I can only stand back and applaud......beautiful work~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jenn E man o man o man yes i can certainly relate to this and i wish i were that strong |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
very nice. I like the message and the way that it was delivered. Also, the way you offset your voice was nicely done. Good job. Unrequited love sucks. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
oh hell yea girl...keep that strength up!!! awesome writing again...great flow too... you've done this before, haven't ya?  i like your attitude... keep it up... Tony  - time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Butterflies, your reply's mean so much and that I left you speechless, well, I will take that as a compliment! I am glad this moved you.Jeffrey, sometimes I am not sure if I am that strong. I will say that strength truly is found within all of us at one level or another. beowulf,thank you so much for your kind comments. I am flattered that you noticed the voice. Tony....love the "oh hell ya girl"....lol It always makes me smile when I see your reply. lol on the attitude, and thank you! Jenn E |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You use your pain and anger and turn it into your strength and that is good...actually great and I in my life know of a special friend that I love with all my heart and she is trying to find this strength and she is making progress. Your words will be shared with her and she will I am sure find more strength from them....You have penned a powerful piece here and I applaud your courage and tenacity.... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jenn E...sometimes we have to go thru rough times to find out just how strong we really are...adn when you can learn and grow thats just that much better...good write here |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
wow such strong words....wow I like this piece and the last stanza...wow, it had that umph that exudes your strength...this is a great piece |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Ohhhhhh Mark...... I truly feel honoured when you reply to me. Your words are always so sinceire and personal for each individual. I am truly touched that my words may possibly give another strenght. That is a reward in itself. Thank you for your words....as I say you are more colorful with eash and every word you say.......like a rainbow! Paula* Thank you for taking the time to read and I take your kind words and say a heartfelt Thank You. JnR4eva* Fondest Thanks for your compliments here. Jenn E |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
sending you back to the top once again. Hold on tight here you gooooooooooooooo |
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