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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 2000-08-05 06:35 PM



If only I had known those moments would have to last....
I sit here with dreams...looking tenderly at our past

I would have held you longer that morning in our bed
I would have listened closer to all that you said

The night we watched dawn kiss the moon
I should have held you there.....long past noon

Every kiss would have been longer and deeper
Now I find myself prisoner of the dream keeper

Please.........send me a moment to hold in my embrace
Yet still my arms are empty... I pray time will race

Holding you close and getting lost in your eyes
Just counting the stars shooting across our skies

This time apart has taught me how to live each day  
Because you don’t know how long those moments will stay

To be back with you and make each moment gold
Just listening to you breathe.....shall never get old


~T and L.....May time have wings for you both~

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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-08-05 06:51 PM


This time apart has taught me how to live each day  
Because you don’t know how long those moments will stay

To be back with you and make each moment gold
Just listening to you breathe.....shall never get old

Your words are so beautiful but the sentiment shines even more.  Your heart knows no bounds.  Wonderful read there "SIS"

brian madden
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2 posted 2000-08-05 06:59 PM


BDC, all I say is Ditto what MArk said because I am in stunned silence after reading such emotionally charged words.

"I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone"
manic street preachers

Jeffrey Carter
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3 posted 2000-08-05 07:09 PM


I feel as if this was written just for me.....Thank you for bringing back the memories  

The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller)


EagleOne
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4 posted 2000-08-05 07:22 PM


Please.........send me a moment to hold in my embrace
Yet still my arms are empty... I pray time will race

Holding you close and getting lost in your eyes
Just counting the stars shooting across our skies

This time apart has taught me how to live each day  
Because you don’t know how long those moments will stay

To be back with you and make each moment gold
Just listening to you breathe.....shall never get old

Wow! This is wonderful my friend.



God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



T McCoy
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5 posted 2000-08-05 08:53 PM


WOW...
you almost had me crying here...

I would have held you longer that morning in our bed
I would have listened closer to all that you said...

this was beautiful...i'm speechless.

Tony

jwesley
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6 posted 2000-08-05 09:06 PM


Very beautifully done, and with such heart.
I ditto everyone...


jwesley

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-08-05 09:14 PM


ButterfliesDC~
What an absolutely beautiful extension of YOU !

'The night we watched dawn kiss the moon
I should have held you there.....long past noon'

So lovely, dear poetess.
~*Marge*~




~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-08-05 09:15 PM


every word...every line...every rhyme
this couldnt touch me any more if it was
engraved on my heart..
god this is just perfection from your
pen, heart and soul...
it is butterfly kissed and angel blessed...
I am printing this out and releasing it into
the wind at sunrise...
I know it is written for someone else
but there is butterfly with whom
I wish to share it...
thank you...
~Butterflies Are Meant To Be Free...
love you for this one my SS
JM



There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


Sunnyone
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9 posted 2000-08-05 09:26 PM


Butterflies...
              Time apart is so hard, but
              time together is so much
              better for it.....

                Your writing is beautiful..
              The replies above mine say
                        it all!!!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


rosepetals25
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10 posted 2000-08-05 09:31 PM


butterflies,

      I have to agree with Tony... this poem brought a tear to my eye.  Such a moving and beautiful poem. I can't pick out any certian line.. I loved it all.  
  
                          rosepetals25

                        

Balladeer
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11 posted 2000-08-05 09:35 PM


This is beautiful ,butterflies, and can apply to so many things...a broken relationship, death, anything that separates two people who love each other. Regret for not having kissed a little longer or held a little stronger is a very powerful and sad emotion.....
Butterflies_dont_cry
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12 posted 2000-08-05 11:51 PM


Mark*......A.K.A. the best brother in the world    Thank you ....your sicere comments always mean so very much to me~

Brian* Such a sweet man you are!  Thank you very much~

Jeffrey* You are very welcome I'm glad to know that I could do something for you~

Eagle* Thank you my dear friend...always MUCH to kind  

Tony* Almost?.......awe shucks    Thank you from the bottom of my heart......I'm very glad you liked it~

jwesley* Thank you, I appreciate your kind words.....and the "ditto"  

Marge* I always smile when I see your comments.....Thank You!!

Janet* Share it please  ..I'm sure the one that it's for wouldn't mind a bit.....especially for a butterfly, Thank you my sweet SS~

Sunny* Each comment is special......as is yours.  Thank you ~

RP* I'm glad you agree......thank you so much~

Balladeer* When I wrote this I had one idea in mind but now after reading the replies.....there are alot of situations this could relate to...I always love to read something through someone elses heart.  Thank you so very much~

wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2000-08-06 02:17 AM


woah the site crashed as i was tryin to reply to this so yuh i didnt read the replies but i know i love this poem and its for someone else yuh its touching...very nicely done bfdc  
cathybohannan
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14 posted 2000-08-06 10:34 AM


This poem is wonderful,it shows everyone
how you feel. I enjoy reading all your poems,
hope to read more.

A.K.A.--Your new "SIS"


Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2000-08-06 02:31 PM


butterflies~
this is so heartfelt...

exquisite....

thats about all that I can manage for now...
(hopelessly lost for words)

regards,
sudhir

vandana
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16 posted 2000-08-06 06:12 PM


I LIKED IT A LOT  
LiLOnE
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Sudbury, Ma
17 posted 2000-08-06 06:18 PM


Butterflies---
That is such a BEAUTIFUL poem!! It almost made me cry becuase it reminded me of something very close to my heart!
Beautifly written!! Love ALL your work!
~*~LiLOnE~*~

shadow of poetry
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18 posted 2000-08-06 09:31 PM


a butterfly said i should make sure i
read this special poem
im so glad i did it is a
wonderful gift of verse and emotion
peace & poetry
lil sis

my sister is the poet
I am but a shadow
by the light of poetry
I read then dream

Butterflies_dont_cry
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19 posted 2000-08-06 11:25 PM


W.O.W.* Thank yuh verily much  

Cathy* Cool...I get a sister in the deal too    I love it when it's a two-fer   thank you so much for your kind reply~

Sudhir* Your loss for words says more than words ever could...thank you from the bottom of my heart~

Vandana* Thank you so much~

Lil* How sweet of you.......I appreciate your comment more than I could ever hope to express...so Thank you very much~

Shadow* I'm still looking for your work   that same little butterfly I think   until then though.....thank you so much for your kindness, your comments touch my heart~

Jenn E
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20 posted 2000-08-06 11:32 PM


You have brought tears to my eyes. You have taken my exact feelings from my life at present and put them into words. I can't thank you enough for this...........I will be sending it on to a special person.....My heart thanks you and if I could hug you I would.
Deepest Thanks for this
Jenn E

Paula Finn
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21 posted 2000-08-06 11:33 PM


Bdc...however you meant this it so obviously touches many people me included...I have tried to live my life with no regrets but there are always some times that the right words or the correct gesture just dont come.

never say never

Butterflies_dont_cry
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22 posted 2000-08-07 07:20 AM


JennE* It's truly an honor...Thank you from the bottom of my heart~ **Hugs**

Paula* Hindsight is a cruel and wonderful thing......Thank you very much for your reply.

kitkat
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23 posted 2000-08-07 11:12 AM


This was very heart felt. Thank-you for sharing.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
24 posted 2000-08-07 10:03 PM


#999 is just a bump you see
to get you to the top
for #1000 is dedicated to thee  

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