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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
AwakeAwake beneath this lattice lace sheer strands, translucent, giving glow Soft moonlight, but a crescent's face alighting slight the earth below As thunder teases, tender sigh of mem'ries aching, now recalled In thought's asylum dare I lie with sleep's arriving ease forstalled And long has lived this night's desire and long have appetitions grown Within my heart there flames a fire that lovers scarce have ever known So to the dark, my whisper's wed and soft, the silence craves my kiss I'll lie upon this lovely bed and close my eyes in reminisce |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Hi Claire ... one word ... AWESOME ... (i'd buy your book, if you were published) |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Wow! This was gorgeous, Claire....so pretty  I loved it, dear friend.Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Exquisite Claire! Such beauty lies within these lines ... the flow, the sentiments ... just an incredibly lovely read! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I especially admire your use of perfect rhymes in this one., great job. < !signature--> Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 09-02-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I have done this many nights my friend. . . many nights. . . Just wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
with such Claire-ity (i am not going to pretend you haven't heard that one a million times) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
M.A., what a nice thing to say...thank you... I will add you to my small list of poetic patrons. I keep it on a bubble gum wrapper. Michael, thanks. I always appreciate your words of encouragement, and I'm glad to know you like this, my friend. Kit, thank you so much for your sincere and generous commentary. It pleases me enormously when I can tell that someone has enjoyed my work, and your kind words make me smile. Irish Rose, I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this...some modern poetry circles claim that rhyme is passe'...I simply cannot agree with that. Thanks for the validating comment! Sven, lying awake can sometimes be torture in and of itself, can it not? Thank you, my friend... Walt, any line coming from you seems original! (and generally is) Thanks a bunch. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Simply beautiful, Claire. I loved it. Dee |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"...and close my eyes in reminisce" I like your style, Claire..  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Claire this is simply AWESOME... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, Well if you think of me I might agree. *L* Wonderful write. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Meadowmuse, So very tender you write, and a tender heart you must have. This following verse is so very ehancing to me. Thank you. So to the dark, my whisper's wed and soft, the silence craves my kiss I'll lie upon this lovely bed and close my eyes in reminisce |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Dee, thank you for your kindness. I appreciate you reading this and taking time to let me know that you enjoyed it. Nan, and I like yours, Nan. Thanks so much. Mark, your enthusiasm is quite flattering, my friend, and I thank you for it. Seymour, of course I'm thinking of you, because you're so very agreeable. Thanks Sy Bill, so very sweet your words to me. Thank you, sincerely. I'm glad this piece touched you. ~ Claire < !signature--> Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 09-03-2000).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Wow,loved it.!!!!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Claire This is Tremendous writing... WOW Regards, sudhir |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Vandana, Hello and thank you for the smiley, enthusiastic Wow. Sudhir, I didn't realize anyone else had read this...you were up awfully early this morning. Thank you for the nod of approval on this piece. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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