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Platonic? What's That?
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Platonic? What's That? |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Disclosure: This has nothing to do with anything that is going on amongst fellow poets here. This is not an autobiographical piece. This is merely something I wrote. Please enjoy.  He thought she could fill the void in his life Only to discover she was another man’s wife. Chagrined by this unfair twist of fate He continued to woo another one’s mate. Words of caring and friendship he would utter Her pulse would race her heart to flutter. No words of love could ever be spoken Her marriage vows should remain unbroken. The closest of friends they quickly became Occasionally, she would feel the shame. For although they did nothing wrong She kept him shrouded all along. Platonic, she feared, her spouse could not see You see, this woman I speak of is me. Affair is a polluted, repulsive expression That does not describe this slight regression. A friendship can occur that does not affect Though care should be taken out of pure respect. The moral of the story is easy to guess… Relationships are not defined by their dress. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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HopelessRomantic New Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 8 |
good one. girls who have a lot of guy friends and say their relationships are "platonic" are a bunch of BS. Believe me, even though I am young, i been through a lot. And this is one of them. all i have to say about that situation is... good writing, real good.. Edited for inappropriate verbiage [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sonjes~ Nice write, hon. Lots of thought to this one. ~*Marge*~ ***Hopeless~ You really should read the guidelines that pertain to graphic language usage. Thank you. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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HopelessRomantic New Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 8 |
i apoligize about that. currently i am kinda upset about things. once again. Sorry about it. It won't happen again. I don't know if it's the young fire or whatever, but I do tend to get a little overboard.. sorry again |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent sonjes, this is something new for you. . . I really liked what you've done here. . . like Marge said, lots of thought in this one. . . Well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
sonjes this was really good, and I imagine parts of it are true, platonic what's that? lol |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
sonjes this was really good, and I imagine parts of it are true, platonic what's that? lol |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
very well written...something to learn... good job!< !signature--> If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao [This message has been edited by AVANTI (edited 09-01-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
sonjes, This was so great!!! You took a topic that is hard to define, and wrapped it up in a poem that says it all!!! Wonderful, and Brilliant!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You have penned it with the passion of it being real and I am glad it wasnt as you said. Your thought into this must have been immense since it is not real life and I commend you on a thorough write. |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Hopeless Romantic - Its nice to see new poets replying as well as posting. thank you for taking the time to read. Marge - Your response means a lot to me because I think you have a natural talent when it comes to writing poetry... Sven - Well...you know me...thinking is what I do best. I analyze things to a fault.  Rosebud - There are, as in most poems, things that are true for everyone in some, way, shape or form. The fun is distinguishing them. AVANTI - But why do there have to be so many lessons to learn in life? The most enjoyable way to learn them is definitely through poetry. Sunny1 - Brilliant? hehe. I'll take wonderful to heart, but brilliant goes straight to the head.  thank you for your encouraging words.Mark - You seem to have a very kind way about you...I find it a personal compliment to have you respond to my work. One thing I have learned is that you are supposed to write what you know. But I think that if you can write about what other people feel and go through around you, your writing can become even more intense. |
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