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Little Red |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Little Red She walked through gloom where giants should In shadowed dancing leaves and wood. Looking for exotic bloom One to light and bright a room. But in the gloom were watching eyes Echo sounds and distant cries Stirs the ghosts within her heart Glues her feet each new impart. She sings a pretty little song To help her faltering along Eyes the night with warning fright Turns her steps twards home and flight. To grandmothers house she heads With flowers in a basket bed. A race against the shadows wend A race against the day light end. She seeks an inner sanctum wall A wall beyond all evils call. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ What big eyes you have ! !  Once upon a time, there was a poet with a rhyme. He told the story, Oh so well ... the big bad wolf no longer dwells ! You are just the best ! And I just love this ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
TERRIFIC WRITING, my friend... seymour, this is great... regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hey there little red riding hood you sure are looking good and so are you Seymour. Your poem's good enough to eat. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Seymour ... loved this I did! The flow, the story ... excellent! Well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
You bring new life to this tale. Very well done!!!!!!!!!! Do you have big eyes? Big hands? Just kidding and I'll stop there. LOL |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, Thank you my *L* Sudhir, Thank you my friend. Kethry Thank you for the read and comment. Kit, Thank you for the well done. Oh2beme, THank you for the nice comment. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hey there, little red riding hood, you sure are lookin' good, you're everything that a big bad wolf could want HOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWLL! Corinne |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Marge was that BEST or BEAST LOL...shivers up the spine at the watching eyes..... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"But in the gloom were watching eyes Echo sounds and distant cries Stirs the ghosts within her heart Glues her feet each new impart." Which sums up exactly the feeling I get when trying to leave the family room [in the basement] after a scary movie and I'm the only one down there and I've got to be the one responsible for turning out all the lights. Move Feet Move! Oh Sy, love the fantastical fantasy of feelings... |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Hey great poem, I've got a good idea - how about instead of running, turn around and blow that big old wolf over, that would be sweet ironic justice for you . I never liked the original tale - you've improved it no end . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
i like this a lot too i read your other..i believe its called the "calligraphy of goldilocks"...im not sure and sorry if i messed up the title...but i like what u are doing with these stories..a nice interpretation indeed have you done one of hansel and grettle? if so please let me know i would love to read "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- RLT |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Well Mr. Tabin... I'm glad I fianlly got around to reading this wonderful piece of work. Thanks for sharing your talent. Peace! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Who's afraid of the big bad. Paula, Thanks for the enjoy. Sunshine, I know what you mean, Nice comment. Angelswing, You know I was thinking along those lines. JnR4eua, No but it's a good idea. Andrew, My thanks goes to you for the read and comment. |
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