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The Pedestal
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The Pedestal |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374
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You view her upon her pedestal You marvel at her brilliance And revel in her beauty The honor to behold Such an illuminating creature As she radiates her light down upon you Blinding you to that which she truly stands upon... With every hurtful word Hateful look Broken promise Agonizing betrayal She raises her pedestal upon your dying soul As you smile... and call it love! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
wonderful poem. I like the way you portrayed her. "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Dawn Eclipse, Thank you and thanks for reading. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
LadySixString, I can certainly relate to this one. You could be speaking of someone I know. Good one! Michael |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
"Blinding you to that which she truly stands upon." This line was very powerful for me. I read it several times, just this one line. If you only knew how true this was. I'm glad it was and not still is. Great Poem. Garfield |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
add another verse or two and this could be a beautiful song......very lovely piece and I am finding your work exceptional. I like your web page by the way....I visited it the other day and I was looking around and found it very intrigueing.  |
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