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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hear the echo? Can you hear it? Like a pebble in the water Your lies ever outward span Touching not just my heart But all who reach to touch my hand Like an echo bouncing backwards What you said comes back to me Wasted hours wasted love Because you lied about being free Like a rose that slowly fades Your words pass into memory Yet the cut still wounds and bleeds As I drift on echoes sea Hear the echo? Can you hear it? |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Terrific Line... "Like an echo bouncing backwards" ooooh, I like that!!! Good one overall!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"Like a pebble in the water Your lies ever outward span Touching not just my heart But all who reach to touch my hand" Paula, what wonderful and descriptive lines in this one. "Your lies ever outward span." Isn't that the truth?!! Very fine work. Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this poem is awesome... man you nailed that rhyme and cadence girl.. very cool poem... must be something in the MO waters that give us that rhyme..huh?  excellent work here Paula, truly jm |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Echoes and ripples ... Kind of like a boomerang effect ... it always comes back ! Hurt is felt in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
 I feel that a relationship has gone bad because someone wasn't honest about already being involved. The pain in this work is obvious. This one I like. I really like. Garfield |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ohce...oops...I mean echo...as in all of the above...great poem, Paula...I like it much...helps to fuel some of the fight in me...grins... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ladysixstring...thanks glad you like this Michael...thank you my friend your words are always treasured JM...thank you girl...MO waters LMAO...must be that yep uh huh...not bad for a two minute poem huh? Marge...boomerang? HHHHMMMMMMMMMMM...it is a hurtful little thing huh? ggrn3...you got it in one LMAO...glad you like it Serenity...kick em once for me LOL...thanks |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OUchhhh....this one hurts and resounded all the way down here in TX....your pain shows vividly and I wish you well.....I am sure he felt your wrath as well. Perfect flow and your growth is showing much. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
kick that begger's butt from here to texas - good one Paula~S~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Mark...all the way to Texas huh? Well dont fret...I'm not hurting...but thanks Wil...LOL my friend...I think my foot would be hurting by then...thanks for stopping by |
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