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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374
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Psychedelic colors running through my angry head Visions of a woman and my lover in my bed Feel like I could die but I wish he were dead instead Psychedelic colors running through my angry head Echoes of her laughter piercing through my ringing ear Every step I take just leads me to my deepest fear I don't want to lose you but I sure don't want you here Echoes of her laughter piercing through my ringing ear I can hear the promises you whispered in the dark Intensify the images that tore my world apart You say nothing happened but it's just that you were caught I can hear the promises you whispered in the dark Don't speak to me in voices of apologetic tone Don't over estimate my need to have you for my own I won't be the door mat of your choice when you come home Don't speak to me in voices of apologetic tone So feel my passion, take my pleasure, give me pain I won't be the loser of your sick and twisted game Take my passion, feel my pleasure, share my sin My memory will haunt you I have crawled beneath your skin [This message has been edited by ladysixstring (edited 08-18-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW!!!!! 2 for 2.....batting a thousand  Great writing and expression The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow! Just amazingly powerful. Write on..get out all that steam.. And thanks for reading my poem to your children.  catalinamoon Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think. Lord Byron |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
LadySxString, This is a powerful poem. I'm impressed with your writing and the way you express yourself. I can't wait to read more. Michael |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
YES!!! picking up my guitar... playing this now... will send you the music later if you want...my guess is, most likely you already have the tones and melody set.... LOVED THIS! |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thank you all! And to doreen peri... you have no idea how wonderful a complement... no... a thrill to hear that my words would inspire someone to "pick up their guitar". Then again, being a fellow musician, I'm sure you do know. Thank you!! -jaimie |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now if you got something to say just say and quit beating around the bush.ROFL Your words are full of that spirit that drives you to higher places and beyond your past pains. Way to go and wonderfully put. Welcome to Passions by the way....I have not been able to do so yet and I am sorry it took me so long to do so. My name is Mark and I am a poetholic. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thank you Mark, for your kind comments on both my poems. All of you certainly have made me feel welcomed!! -jaimie [This message has been edited by ladysixstring (edited 08-18-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
How I missed your entrance i do not know but before the day is through I will find your opening shot...this is such a strong piece...powerfully written...welcome |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~POW-ER-FUL!!! My goodness this got me all stirred up! Strength. Take care LSS. *Peace. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Paula Finn... Thank you very much! SpitFire... don't hurt anyone... LOL Thanks a lot!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very, very impressive! The obvious melody of the poem give it the perfect intensity it requires and the lyrics are very powerful...a keeper, for sure. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
I echo all the WOWS. W O W!!! This will be a hit if you elect to sing the lyrical masterpiece. If I were a musician, I would already have the music in the mail to you. Excellent!!!  Garfield |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
eats at ya, huh? I've seen those colors, in real life...they aren't pretty. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
OH OH OH this poem is so so i cant even think of the word..lets say.. emphatic words of truth which you have spoken..my my my you have displayed some wonderful imagery and forceful emotions...i loved this poem VERY much hope to read more "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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