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can't you see me dying?
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can't you see me dying? |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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Today, this very moment as the screams in my head from my mouth echo and resound in the frustration of unreason I look at you and I wish I could kill you not with a gun or a knife with my bare hands I want to strangle the life out of you like you have done me... but in your death I would be kinder and quicker than you have been dragging it out out for years and years just more stuff coming out...I am actually getting better, well better than this poem sounds...sighs and hugs [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-25-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm glad you put that disclaimer... I was lacing up my steel-toed boots... I don't need to remind you why, do I? *G* Gritty and full of grief... and oh yeah... good! *S* |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep, lol, you can unlace those boots, this was from the other day...just thought it should be documented...it is a turning point...and I want to remember it...not file it away with my other nonmemories...sighs...and thanks |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corazon, this was way too real for me. My only thought about this very powerful poem, is get rid of this problem.... Then smile and write something sweet. Parker |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
If only we could simply "get rid of the problem."  I enjoyed, Corazon. And was frightened.Mike |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh hon...this one brings tears to my eyes...I know how this feels oh too well. I remember in one moment of desperation oh so many years ago handing him a loaded handgun and telling him to shoot me and put me out of my misery rather than kill me slowly like he was doing. I'm glad that didn't happen, but there are times when the hurt is so strong, the need to get out overwhelming that we become desperate and can't think. Please know I am here for you whenever you need to talk. E-mail me or send a message and we can meet on Yahoo messanger. Until then, hold strong and here's a big hug. ((((((((((((HUG)))))))))))) Ruth |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Very powerful Corazon !! ... it's good to hear that you're getting better ... HUSG .. Auntie, you switched from bat to steel-toed boots ?? ... whose head did you break your bat on ? ..  |
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paulsm Junior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 48 |
Powerful but scary, Not sure about this one  Paul Slow Down, stop to smell the roses and stroll through the garden of life, it will be a more pleasurable experience. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can feel the strength that you draw from getting these feelings down on paper. The release of it can feel good and can be very good for you......a great way to rid the system of unwanted viruses. Keep it up, Corazon, and get through it. Better days are coming, I'm sure |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I could have written these very words a few years back. They hit the nail right on the head. I am glad that you are getting this out of your system. Brighter days are definitely ahead! HUGS Denise |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, I sure hope so |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
THis poem is incredible....so powerful and real. I am so glad that you are finding your way out of your hurt. Well Done....  |
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