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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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0 posted 2000-02-21 04:44 PM


~Till Something Shatters~

Wanting to scream...
scream till something shatters-
yet what I want never seems to matter.

Choices and commitments,
they've all been made
yet I look at you now, and suddenly I want to trade.

I cant stop these feelings, just like I cant stop the rain,
but these desires are wrong-they'll cause us all pain.

Its unfair of me, "to want my cake and eat it too"-
I cant have them...and still have you.

Its a choice my heart refuses to make,
promises of time, I just cant break.

I always end up hurting, it doesn't seem to matter-
Again I want to scream...
scream, till something shatters.

Janet Marie



 I love you
Is all that you can't say-
Years gone by and still...
Words don't come easily
Like I love you, I love you...
But you can say baby...
Baby can I hold you tonight
Maybe if I told you the right words
At the right time you'd be mine...
Tracy Chapman



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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
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Arkansas
1 posted 2000-02-21 05:16 PM


Aahh geesh!  Here, let me scream with you and we can have a duet between us!  LOL  I can definately relate to the frustration you feel here!  I've been wanting to scream myself, but didn't want to do it alone...     Thanks for sharing !  This was powerfully painful.
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 2000-02-21 05:17 PM


Yep - been here before!  



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

sonjes
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since 2000-02-18
Posts 564
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-02-21 05:18 PM


May I scream too?  Yes, I believe I feel for you, Janet Marie.  I, too, want my cake and eat it too.  It makes me wish I had leased just a little longer.  You have written quite eloquently what I do not have the courage to do.  I think I may have to take a trip to the "dark" side and read some more.  Thank you.
deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
4 posted 2000-02-21 05:44 PM


It's nice to frequent another forum and find you there!  Janet get off by your self and scream to your hearts delight--it will help clear the system, and get the rage inside, that needs to find release or will start poisoning your thoughts more & more.
God bless you Friend,  David


 "Our Creativity points to a Higher Creator--we couldn't have just happened, and for what ability we may possess--to God be the glory." -dlw-



devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
5 posted 2000-02-21 05:54 PM


A good scream never hurt anyone dear...it's better to let it out!!! Then you can start figuring out what you want!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

freckles
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since 2000-02-12
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Virginia USA
6 posted 2000-02-21 06:55 PM


Janet Marie.....WOW.....when I said I would look for your work, little did I know what I would find.  I really like this (been on the other side of that equation before--that makes one want to scream too).  Let's all just have a scream party...AAARRRGGGHHH!!!  Whew, I feel better now!!
Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-02-22 12:24 PM


you SCREAM...I'll scream...WE ALL NEED A GOOD SCREAM!!
LOL!!
THANKS SO MUCH  for all the kind words...this was an old one from a few years ago...I thought I'd sneak out of my home away from home over at Dark Passions and post here for a change. Come and visit us over there sometime...
take care, janet marie

 I love you
Is all that you can't say-
Years gone by and still...
Words don't come easily
Like I love you, I love you...
But you can say baby...
Baby can I hold you tonight
Maybe if I told you the right words
At the right time you'd be mine...
Tracy Chapman



Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2000-02-22 12:35 PM


JanetMarie~
Come on .. you can do better than that !
SCREAM
No ... Louder !
SCREAM
No ... I said LOUDER !
SCREAM
Feel better ?
Good !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
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Wyoming
9 posted 2000-02-22 12:42 PM


Nothing wrong with a good scream Janet.  Hope it made you feel better.    

Marge - I think you just shattered something! LOL

[This message has been edited by Eloise (edited 02-22-2000).]

January Flowers
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since 2000-02-01
Posts 209
South Carolina
10 posted 2000-02-24 01:31 PM


Perfectly displayed
is this "too common"
yearning to SCREAM.
Enjoyed!

Martie
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11 posted 2000-02-24 01:45 PM


It came one day
when the sun shone
an ordinary day

I felt it coming
not knowing precisely
what it was
but making room
just the same

It grew so quickly
I didn’t think to stop it
didn’t want to really

It filled me like
some deadly phallus
then tore from me
a stranger
***
Your poem reminded me of this poem I wrote a while back.  

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
12 posted 2000-02-24 07:32 PM


Janet, I just did that very thing the other day in the Alley.  I screamed.  David's right, you need to let it out so it don't build up, and then blow. Go outside and let it rip!

God bless you!

 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
13 posted 2000-02-24 08:52 PM


It can get confusing, these choices in life, though feelings are not always chosen.
Good poem
Liz

Denise
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14 posted 2000-02-24 11:12 PM


Been there, done that!! Very good, Janet Marie!

Denise

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
15 posted 2000-02-28 07:08 AM


Yelp! Most of us know what your talking about. You might try throwing a gallon of milk across the kitchen sometimes, it made
me feel better once.
I really enjoyed this one.
Alle'cram

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