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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I watched a spider weaving, With the tiniest of threads. A silken thread of danger, In which many bugs were lead. She dangled from a single branch, Just air beneath her feet. She wound around this tiny rope, Not scared of what's beneath. She lit upon a little leaf, And climbed her way back up. She started on her trip once more, She knew soon that she would sup. I watched her weave for quiet a while, The day began to dim. I lost her in the waining light, A chill caressed my skin. I looked back in the morning, The web was all complete. There shining with the morning dew, Each sparkle, Oh so sweet. She worked so hard to build this home, Never once did she give up. Even when the neighbour boy, Near destroyed it with his cup. She set at once to repairing, Her life, also her home. All that strength and courage, I'd like to call my own. Here I stand surrounded, By the pieces of my home. I am just defeated, And weary to the bone. Tell me where the spider finds, The resource to repair. A shattered life once beautiful, And far beyound compare. I take a breath, begin to move, Picking pieces one by one. Hoping that today I sup, When the day is done. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sometimes that's all we can do my friend....pick up the pieces and keep plugging along. Nice poem  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A wonderful observation and comparison...there is MUCH to be said for perseverance and hard work! Claire ** If this happens to show up twice ~ I'm sorry...trying to get used to a new laptop and I keep hitting the wrong buttons... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Such is life, picking up pieces and moving on, even when we don't think we can or want to. I think in time we find that it IS a beautiful world and much of our strength comes from overcoming the hardships. Your poem is very well written and is a nice analogy. Best to you, Danny |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent comparison, Marilyn. We could all learn from that spider. Spiders don't have the ability to think, to cry, to make excuses, to feel sorry for themselves, to look for pity or fall into many of the traps we humans do. They have a goal and they achieve it through sheer determination and a refusal to quit, regardless of the circumstances. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
the black widow spiders' web is spun so precise ... that it was used in the Norton bombsite during WW2 ... |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Hoot...Yes, there are times when all we can do is trudge with those pieces. Picking them up when we have no idea where to put them. Meadowmuse....Thankyou and I agree. Hard work accomplishes much. Balladeer....Sometimes I think it would be wonderful to go purely on instinct. Nothing to hold you back or bring you down. then I realize how much of life would be missing. Thankyou my friend. Rex....That is a very interesting piece of information. Can't quiey figure out how those webs would be used...but it is still interesting. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful imagery, wonderful analagy. It was lovely to read Marilyn. Well done my sis May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 Great analogy, Marilyn..  |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Marilyn, Your words here are so beautifully spun into a fabulous poem. Never did I compare the two or even analyze as well as you the true mystery of a spiders life. (they are not my favorite creature)Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Interesting poem Beautifully written I enjoy reading all of your poems Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 02-18-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Man, did this one ever hit home! We'll find that reserve of strength somewhere, it's called survival, right? Thanks for this! Corinne |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
I can see that your a very talented young lady. < !signature-->I can also feel a bit of a broken heart from your writing`s. Ok I`m the Wizzard so I`m going to cast a spell for you... KAZAMM..SHAZAMM I KNOW HOW YOU FEEL KAZAMM..SHAZAMM..NOW  I KNOW KINDA GOOFY HUH? I HOPE IT WAS GOOFY ENOUGH TO MAKE YOU SMILE Excellent Writing Today is the first day of the rest of my life. And the begining of a new one. [This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-18-2000).] |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent poem Marilyn. Not only does it flow wonderfully, but it has a powerful message behind it. Sometimes determination is all we have, and we have to cling to it. We are never defeated until we give up. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Marilyn, this is a beautiful poem and I'm positive you'll find the strength and extra energy to hold on and re-build. You know where to find me, don't you ? (((((HUGS))))) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
A marvellously written epic tale here of the comparison between an insect's triumph and your own life m'friend! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
A great tale and poem about life. Thanks for sharing. Parker |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I just wanted you all to know what your comments on this piece mean to me. I struggled with this for 2 weeks and hoped it had suceeded. By your replies I guess I did. Thankyou all. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Marilyn....a spider acts only on instinct to do what it is programmed to do and really thinks not too much about a web in tatters. We act with emotions and I am so glad we were created that way...to experience sadness or loss and then to let those negative feelings give way to love and hope. A spider never gets to experience those other emotions. The next meal is all that matters. Robert |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I'm sure you will Marilyn Such a beautiful poem Sad it's true, but still moving Well done, very well If you keep destroying a spiders web It becomes uneven when the spider works it over So eventually the spider moves away and start's a new web somewhere safe The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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