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and oh yes, I forgot to tell you |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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oh yes, I forgot to tell you one day my heart and I will soar and meet you in the sky one day I will leave these earth bound feet that hold me tight to paydays and pantyhose and one day they will make cars that don't break, and one day I will win the lottery... and, oh yes, I forgot to tell you the girl is a dreamer she can't help it you see she just grew up that way. realities can sometimes do that you know she sees a tree, any tree and dreams it filled with fruit, she sees the hungry and dreams them fed she sees her frown and dreams the day it will be a smile. She sees in her dreams the day the lonely is no more and she dreams of the love who will once again lift her chin, kiss her lips and passionately adore her, She dreams... for each day she lives, she dreams the next will be better. For each day that isn't she just dreams it so. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Corazon, this is great! I liked the last two lines best!  -SEA |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sometimes it takes our dreams to see us through and with any luck, our dreams become realities |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corazon, It is a nice poem, well written with a good ending. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Welcome! Here's to dreams, you have a tender heart. Sounds a lot like the way I think too. Wonderful! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
From one dreamer to another... well done! *S* Big hugs to the O&O with heart! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
SEA....thanks hoot, yep, dreams do become realities if you work at them! just dreaming doesn't get you anywhere seymore....thanks whtdove...thank you, from one tender heart to another suthern thanks[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-07-2000).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
How uplifting! I could feel the wind in my hair....*smiling* When eveything else is gone...what is left?..if not our dreams? Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
The ending made the poem m'friend...twas lovely!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah yes - would we but always have "what dreams are made of"... nice one, Corazon..  |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
May all of your dreams come true. In the mean time...keep up the good work! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A good dream is sometimes preferable over a harsh reality... very positive writing. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow. A very strong, yet tender, poem. I loved the images you conjured up -- about trees filled with fruit, the hungry being fed, being kissed, etc. Well done. Keep 'em coming! Mike |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Corazon, I love it ... ... HUSG |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Corazon, it is the sun Your dream is not the only one Never lose sight of reality But do dream about your destiny Keep the faith within your soul One day perhaps you reach your goal Such a nice poem you did The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon- I just love it when dreams make their way to the light of day and end up here for me to share. Dreams are not just phantoms of the night ... they are the visions within the souls of daylight. Beautifully presented. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
And, and,....what color panties are you wearing?..And...and...can I shave your upper thighs?...And and...good poem...and.... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
Breathe~ "How uplifting!" thanks I like that….I have been sort of a downer lately, so this is a compliment devina thanks, and how funny, I wrote the ending first and the rest of the poem to go with it Nan thanks, your compliments mean a lot Bbuzz thanks…yours too! Balladeer…thanks and yep you are right there bsquirrel thanks, coming from you that means a lot JTF *big grins* thanks HelmutB "Never lose sight of reality But do dream about your destiny" I like that, good thing to think about every morning, thanks Marge " Dreams are not just phantoms of the night ... they are the visions within the souls of daylight." wow that is such a way to describe them…..beautiful Marge, thanks for the comment. Toerag ok...here goes….none, no and thanks……thanks sweetie….good to see you [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-08-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Some wonderful lines in this poem, and you see all the dreamers responding. I like the ending Good work Liz |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This is great! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I love this poem, a dreamer I will always be also, cause when dreams come true I feel like a kid in a candy store. |
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