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~ Waiting On A Sign~
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~ Waiting On A Sign~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She stands in the corner ... waiting for his sign. If he could only just let her in, contentment would define. Her need so intense, it draws and holds him there ... While at the same time, his long protected heart, it does scare. His body he offers ... his emotions he spares. She understand his reasons, there is only so much ... he can allow himself to share. Still he comforts her gently, with his gifts of verse and rhyme. Embracing her pain ... with his perfect words so sublime. All she really wants ... is to ease his tired mind. They both learned long ago ... reality can be unkind. Her eyes see his heart, hidden between the lines. She is so drawn to his words ... the intense depth of his mind. Consumed by him ... she would give herself away. Contentment comes with much cost, her heart being the price to pay. More than she wants him -- she wants him to see his own light. She wishes for him the vision ... to see himself with his gifted poetic sight. So she tries to accept ... he's not hers to hold. Still fate brought them to here ... In time the reasons will be told. Until then, she stands in the corner ... patiently waiting for his sign. And she writes him this poem ... hoping to reach him with her rhyme. Janet Marie Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--I am still trying to get over this awful cold, and now you've gone and made me cry...oh me aching sinuses... Still on the same page with me m'twin... Thank you for saying it so well. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
JM, here's lookin at you BEG! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I like this...perhaps you should be a bit more obvious though....something like "Hey you, over here!"  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
LOL at Danny!  Er...I was thinking this poem was more for say...um...another wonderful man who writes...not you sir. LOL I don't know, I may be wrong, but me thinks not!  Janet, this is breathtaking and just aches with sincerity. Hang in there girl...patience is the key! Begging won't get you far. hehehe Just be there for him, like you are...sometimes that's what men need most. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, I'm sure you will reach your goal. Beautiful poem. *L* |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Janet! Denise |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Janet Marie, Beautiful poem Janet, I hope your dreams come true. Cerenity |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
JM.... maybe you just need to be chased by another romantic poet, get him moving off his butt. Get him to show a little heart of emotion, free himself from any reservations. So, I'm free saturday.... If that doesn't work maybe I'll have to serenade you with some sweet love poems.Parker |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Janet, I would like to say thank you for sharing this poem at just the right time. I really needed to hear such a beautifully written work of art. You have enlightened me to a whole new plane of thought. One that I now can see the bigger picture of a relationship. You certainly have a big heart. Continue on your journey and keep your head up. You wiil achieve your heart's desire. With much love and admiration, Jeffrey |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Janet, dear ..... such a beautiful, heartfelt piece .... this is one lucky fellow to have you in his corner ... Good luck; I hope this opens his eyes ....... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jm, this is lovely. Hey if he can't see what a wonderful person and poet you are....lose him! Marina |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Janet Marie~ I love the tenderness in this one. I am going through something similar right now. Maybe we ahould both try to get theri attention with a huge ~~whistle!!!~~~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Janet Marie, This was very moving, I hope it reaches him. You obviously have some very intense feelings bubbling there. I enjoyed reading thhis piece of work. Thank you. David2 |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
JM I love this, it's so very real. I agree with Hoot_owl_rn though, sometimes you have to make very obvious. Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Truly written from the heart, and a tender heart at that. A beautiful piece Liz |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
You go girl! =) Hope he get the message, but until then... take that body he's offering!!! That's what I'd do.. well.. you know.. if I were you and he was a she... =) J/K "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LOL You guys make me smile and laugh and blush and glow all at once... thank you for the encouragment and sweet replies...you all help me to strive for new poetic horizons...I grow in your praises... and somehow thank you seems like such an indequate word for such a wonderful gift.... there are too many sweet and touching replies here to single out..please know you ALL touched me. BUT I MUST reply to Parker...some offers just cant be passed up on LOL SERENADE AWAY !!!! what woman on this earth thats even remotely breathing could pass that Offer up... TYTHANK YOU ALL love ya all jm |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ I can too easily remember what this feels like....UGH....such a beautiful poem. -SEA |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Janet-Hope this reaches the one it is intended for--hope he relizes it is for him. Good Luck This is beautiful. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This flows really well Janet... Makes me glad I have my man right at home waiting on me!!! Just some advice- everyone deserves love...find someone whose's not taken...and your heart will know happiness!!! Good luck to you!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 J.M.* WOW!!! This is amazing and shook me head to toe....or would that be wing to wing...You capture such amazing feeling here!!! His body he offers ... his emotions he spares. She understand his reasons, there is only so much ... he can allow himself to share Until then, she stands in the corner ... patiently waiting for his sign. And she writes him this poem ... hoping to reach him with her rhyme. Magnificent!!!! Angel wing hugs to you my S.S. for I understand all that you write with and relate to what you feel here. Take care of you!!! Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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