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Autumn Breeze
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Autumn Breeze |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I wrote this one some time ago--forgive me, but I needed to remember what it felt like. Here goes: Autumn Breeze Surprised, I knew, like a tickling sneeze twitching in my nose. I saw your eyes, so much like mine... (yes, I think they were my own.) How can this be? An Autumn breeze? Dusting blood-sweat from my brow? I need to build a kite to fly if I can remember how. Calloused feet stifling heat-- we need a blanket spread. There--a magnolia come, and I'll show you a place to rest your head. Autumn breeze, don't tease me, please... (We both know it's July.) Two pairs of feet grip hot streets as four eyes search the sky. This moment now let's make no vows while these autumn breezes blow. I'll be content with no intent of malice when you go. Changes of season are instinct--not reason; let us build a kite and float. 'Fore winter freezes turn sweet breezes into cold familiar snow. Then I'll desire the heat of a fire, searching for a warmer coat. Shivering, remembering how Autumn breezes blow. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Well now ... I really like this one I love the suttle way you change from magic to melancholy ... I get more from this every time I read it ... ''' ~ 10.0 ~ '''  Rex}<{{{{o> I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Awwww...I really like this! Brought back wonderful childhood memories....Oh to be a child again...The sun felt so different then...  )Great poem! Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is full of emotion hun...from sadness to a hint of gentle love...utterly perfect!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity- This is soooooo pretty. Autumn breezes are lovely on the skin and you portrayed them beautifully. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
What a beautiful feeling! When the moment passes, we can hold tight to the memories. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
very very nice serenity. You have truely developed what you were feeling. Rich |
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