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Solitary Tear (A Tanka response to Romantic Heart)
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Solitary Tear (A Tanka response to Romantic Heart) |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
solitary tear in falling dost thou hear me wailing Autumn wind by intoning Siren's song I grieve thy passing moment |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Very concise and touching. David2 |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you, David2. I strive for simplicity. INclan |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
INClan, you've certainly wasted no words here...this is lovely, to be sure. ~ Claire **don't know how I goofed on your name...so sorrry!!  [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 03-24-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Inclan...this is perfect |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you so much Meadowmuse. I understand about the name...people have done far worse. I take/took NO offence. Ruth, from you, that is HIGH praise indeed. As a poet and person I respect and admire, your opinion carries great weight with me...thank you. Best Regards, INclan |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
INclan, The greatest things are often rooted in simplicity! Love the poem. Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, INclan! This is lovely! Denise |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
INclan, this is great, tanka is so beautiful and your is no exception! WELL DONE! Dennis :^) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A simple thing, said in just the right way, like this, has such impact. Wonderfully done! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, INclan~ I am INclined to like it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Panthers Chrysalis Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 51 |
INclan... Simple- yet so in-depth! Nice! |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you, Christy, dsnyder, Dennis, Martie, Marge and Panther....your encouragement is worth it's weight in gold! Welcome to Passions, Panthers Chrysalis. Since this was a response to "A Romantic Heart," I have been waiting for her response...I wait on. INclan |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I hear thy voice, As winds whisper it to thy ear, do not grieve for I am here, Never shall fall a solitary tear, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Inclan this is PERFECT! its beauty is in it sweet emotions,expressed so simply, yet with so much emotional depth. I've never tried a Tanka...this one makes me think I might like to, its excellent. take care, jm PS...glad you got the response you've been waiting for...its perfect too...worth the wait in my humble opinion  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sometimes it is very pleasant just to see the lady disrobed, devoid of baubles and make-up, standing there in the natural beauty of pure simplicity....like your poetry. I admire your style. |
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lindak6 New Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 9 |
so few words, so much meaning! sweet |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I felt that solitary tear~ Beatifully written~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
IN, At first I was worried that I'd lost the respect of a good poet. I can sleep now. M. |
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Tenderheart Junior Member
since 2000-03-20
Posts 17 |
INclan Simple..beautiful..full of sensations...most enjoyable! Thank you! |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you, Romantic Heart. I have been waiting for your response. It was worth the wait! Thank you, Janet, Balladeer, Lindak6, Mariee66, bsquirrel, and Tenderheart. Good to see you solved the password problem, Tenderheart. I am indebted to you all for setting a new response record for me. INclan |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
let me contribute towards your high record! ") i think this one was unique and exceptional(i love the language here) but i don't understand what you mean by "siren's song"--can u e-mail me to tell me the answer? thanx in advance [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 04-20-2000).] |
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