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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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You repress and cover your inner feelings and show. Only that, that which you allow others to see and know; But, I saw I know, I see. The you, the you desperately fighting to get out, to be free; Within the recesses of your heart, you mind, your soul, you're afraid to show, to let others know-that you're vulnerable. You laugh, you joke, you play, and so well you cover; your hurt, your despair, and, how you suffer; I come to you, no knight, no shining armor of white. But only, so you'll know and maybe might. Share with me that which you hide, hide deep inside. Share with me, a friend, your inner being, where you truly abide; So hopefully someday you'll use your rusty key. And invite someone in, in to see, the true you within, your reflective twin, and just maybe she, who you allow to se, just maybe, might, be me! Did Jesus laugh? I think He did, 'cause He was once a little kid; and all of us were made with joy both sugar-spice girl and snake-snail boy! |
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Rosalind Palafox
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MemberPosts 88 |
I know lots of people who act this way. good poem.  ~Rosalind~"Love comes but never goes, for if it ever went, it was never love to begin with." |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Well Mel...if this doesn't break the ice with this person, I surely don't know what will...beautiful thoughts here! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Great poem, I know someone who this poem would be perfect for. I am touched by the sentiment of this poem. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
This is fantastic,youve really captured the fear to let others in some of us have,well done. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
"Your reflective twin"... That is my favorite line...but I like the whole thing...great expressions...  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
This sad inspriration remined my on an old song. "The Tears of a Clown, when no one is around" Not sure who did this song. But yes the poem is nicely done. Thanks for the insight The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
TEARS OF A CLOWN was Smoky Robinson and the Miracles...awesome song. And yes, you caotured this personality veyr well...I think we all know people we'd like to have read this poem |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
TEARS OF A CLOWN was Smoky Robinson and the Miracles...awesome song. And yes, you caotured this personality veyr well...I think we all know people we'd like to have read this poem |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Very nice poem Echo. Sometimes it's hard to open up and reveal yourself. But with a friend like you I'm sure that person will come around. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
There's a lot of feeling in this poem.It describes a lot of people. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good work with this Echo. |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
I love it. It describes someone I know so well, its amazing  )~Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Wow....this describes my best friend to a "T"....you've obviously done a great job, seeing as how all these people say that they know someone like the person you've described here. Good work.Bobbycat =^..^= |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You have certainly been on a roll here lately! Oh the inner pain, and then shutting the rest of the world out. So we don't let anyone else in there to hurt. That rusty key can always be cleaned and polished. With the right key to the right door, we can have the truest, purest love of all! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Echo- This is pretty gosh-darned good poetry ! Your thoughts found their way to the page and turned on a light for me. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nice effort Echo... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Echo, I enjoyed this poem very much. So sad the need to hide inside, but, so well understood by so many. -SEA |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful thoughts Melanie to match the beautiful person behind them |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I thought a lot tonight as I watched you bump people one after one long after hours and people had all said so long, and too, the poem you had sung. I would question what I thought you believed after seeing the things you'd rung. I did a bit of pondering of what you've really done. Does a Christian really bear false witness... Is there any more to say..? |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Great poem, yet again your poetry makes me warm inside, I may use that as a chat up line for some one I know ... we'll see, I'll tell you if it works . |
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