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To Look Through Your Eyes... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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I could break you with just one glance, Perhaps I should- given the chance... Inflict all the pain you've given me, I'll make you love, make you believe, Only to find that you were deceived. Take your trusting heart in my hands, Fill your soul with selfish demands, Say things that you'll never understand, Then crush you as only I can. Drain you soul with bitter lies, Until your pain you can't disguise, Then leave you on your own to cry. Or maybe I'll just go on with my life, Cut down your ego(sharper than a knife) Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
The later would be my choise If i had a say But I'm sure everyone has they own way Your poem nice it's done I can surely say that I don't want to be the one In neither case  The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Devina this poem has such a beauiful flow. I liked the line "crush you as only I can" and then you said "or maybe I'll just go on with my life." very nice. James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Devina, I really enjoyed this piece, especially the last two lines. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, just the kind of uplifting poem I needed to hear right now....LOL Just kidding, Devina. This was very "sharp" to say the least - the last couple of lines really pack a punch. Michael |
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Evad Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 12 |
Devina: What happened in your life? Are you holding anything back? I like your "passions"! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Helmut- I'm not...scaring you...am I???? (I didn't mean the knife literally!!??)lol My pain has many channels of dealing...the main one being my poetry...thanks for the read m'dear!!! James- thanks for that- I wasn't too sure about my flow on this one...anger was all I saw!!!G* DA- thanks...the last two lines were VERY- debatable but decided on this, glad you like!! Micheal- glad to send your spirits soaring!!! lol Sorry bout the bitterness...but a scorned female knows no bounds!!!! hehe Evad- I hold back naught in my poetry...my heart's right there...if you were to read my past few...I'd unfold very neatly before your eyes...the soap-opera that tis my life!!! Thanks for the concern!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very well written, these emotions we do feel when the pain we need to heal |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Oh yes, Devina, I've been here recently. Great how you got all that anger out! I like this  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Thanks you two...I do feel much better!!G** If you see me venting yet again...please forgive!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Don't mess with Devina! Love the power in this! Corinne |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
I would sure hate to be in his shoe`s. Nice job Devina.....Im glad you didn`t decide to cut something else of his with that knife Today is the first day of the rest of your life. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*Giggling* at that Corrine!!! Did I really sound so..mean???? lol Wizzard- So now you're giving me new ideas, huh??? hehe...that's something to think about m'friend... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
I know the mindset behind these thoughts lol, good poem. |
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Rosalind Palafox
Registered
MemberPosts 88 |
ouch! "Love comes but never goes, for if it ever went, it was never love to begin with." |
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