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Moonshine
Member

since 1999-10-01

Posts 265
Australia

0 posted 2000-03-08 09:33 PM

Alone in the darkness
of her garden she wilts,
Her once vibrant light
shines no more,
The sweet colours of her petals
bleed slowly from her,
The last shimmer of life
dully ebbs to the cold floor,
And with wounds left unhealed
by the breadth of endless time,
Her frail, broken body
finally crumbles beneath her,
Falling rapidly through
the abyss of slow beating pain,
To the rotting undergrowth
where strong roots of hope once were,
And like a loving mother calling
her sweet child to come home,
The dank, wet earth wraps itself
around her dying soul,
She takes comfort in the cold
and dark of nothingness,
Where nothing and noone
exist anymore.

[This message has been edited by Moonshine (edited 03-08-2000).]

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2000-03-08 09:36 PM

Wow Moonshine! Pretty powerful work you have here--sometimes I'd like to do just as the woman in the poem is doing...beautiful job.

Elizabeth

"He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

2 posted 2000-03-08 09:38 PM

Moonshine this poem is amazing I'm numb with the feelings that shot through me as I read it....and most of all felt it. I understand the words and have lived a life such as this. Thank you for writing from your soul and sharing it.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2000-03-08 09:43 PM

WOW, Moonshine this is excellent with great imagery. Well done piece.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Moonshine
Member

since 1999-10-01

Posts 265
Australia

4 posted 2000-03-09 08:35 AM

Thanx for your lovely reply and compliment Elizabeth - I wasn't gonna post this but my flatmate thought I should. You would like to do what the woman in the poem does? Why (may I ask)? It is a very personal poem for me.

Moonshine.

Moonshine
Member

since 1999-10-01

Posts 265
Australia

5 posted 2000-03-09 08:38 AM

Thanx for your lovely reply and compliment B_D_C!

Moonshine
Member

since 1999-10-01

Posts 265
Australia

6 posted 2000-03-09 08:39 AM

Thanx for your lovely reply and for your encouragement DA.

Moonshine.

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