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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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FORSAKEN Tempest tossed, I wander, lost Never to find my way. All hope for naught, now all forgot, There is no yesterday. A wisp, a dream, all life does seem To pass, a breathless sigh. A missing gleam from eyes in deem Of never said goodbye. On wings I sail ne'er to avail Tomorrow's setting sun. A pitch black veil, my Holy Grail, I live, alive to none. In vision quest, given my best, I lay my trophies down. At sweet behest of Love in jest, To bear a jester's crown. Opening eyes by the night skies I fall to Destiny. Therein arise through tainted lies My unfeigned fallacy. Through teary view of all life new Alas, the angel sings. By saddened hue of pink, sky blue, I rest my weary wings. To hold command o'er reprimand If by ash or by dust. To dare but stand at my own hand Of decorated trust. If heretofore on dreamless shore What hope have I to borrow? By time foreswore I soar no more, Never meet my tomorrow. Michael Anderson 'Tis true, Love lasts forever, Only here memory slips away. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The feeling that you write with is amazing, yet makes my heart ache for you and the pain that you reach to in your poetry. You are an amazing writer. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Michael....the rhythm and rhyme in this is something else. I like it I do  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Before I can say a word about this poem I have to get a new dictionary..all the words that mean superlative/stupendenous/wonderful/magnificent are faded from use on all your previous work....someone will have to think of a new word to describe perfect poetry!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Opening eyes by the night skies I fall to Destiny. Therein arise through tainted lies My unfeigned fallacy. Through teary view of all life new Alas, the angel sings. By saddened hue of pink, sky blue, I rest my weary wings." rest your heart...rest your wings... rest while sweet angels sing. fate and destiny will do the "rest"... we must believe... to pass love's test. TO:Poet Divine... next to "perfect poetry" in the dictionary..."me thinks" there is a picture of Michael  jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Michael - Michael - Michael~ DAMN, this is good. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"...Michael was said to have been the leader of God's angelic army during the war in Heaven, and God delegated Michael the divine 'words of power' that would defeat the rebellious troops and propel them to the underworld..." THE WOMAN'S ENCYCLOPEDIA OF MYTHS AND SECRETS But hey, no pressure. lol. don't even sweat it. (See there? You ARE incredible, Michael...) |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
Michael,Michael,Michael. You never seem to amaze me. Your way with words should capture the hearts of many women. If I were gay,I would want you. Well Im not so I`ll just say ANOTHER NICE READ MICHAEL.lol |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Michael you wrote the passion and I felt it This was fantastic, it went right through me Tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
So very beautiful Michael, I love it! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Whoa boy! Check out THAT rhyme scheme! You know what this means to me Mike? It means you have by far too much free time on your hands! What have I said about you showing me up? Not allowed, remember! Really though bro, this slams home and hits hard. |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Butterflies_dont_cry, That is the ultimate compliment to a writer...to know he has moved the reader to such emotion. TY PdV, you humble me....I am not worthy. Janet, Fate and Destiny have their hands full with me...LOL Thank you for the beautiful words, seriously. Marge, can you say that in here? serenity, still making my way toward I-10...it's funny you brought up St. Michael I am working on a project with Christopher on the archangel. It will be a poem overlaying Christopher's wonderful artwork. I'll post it here when it is completed. tracie, so glad to have touched you. Christopher - yeah yeah, well we all can't work 10 jobs like yourself....and get to go to Boulder and all those other wonderful cities.... No, instead, we get to stay home and pull our graying hairs out trying to complete "aliterary acrostic nightmarish challenges" from the likes of yourself.... Just wait - the next challenge comes from me to you!!! Thank you one and all for the kind replies. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I can feel this poem writing itself on my soul. Outstanding. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I too have run out of words, you've put forth some of the best damn poetry I've seen. All I have left is BRAVO! Standing Ovation!!!!! |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
I don't post things to often here but I think I come and read all the wonderful poetry here almost daily... guess I just like to take it all in..... and you, you've compelled me to post some kind of response because every single poem I read by you here seems to be speaking straight to my heart... I'm not a critic in the fact that I don't really know all the grammatical things that make a poem good or not, but all of the poems I read by you, they touch me... deeply.. and isn't that what really matters? Isn't that the point of any form of art? You are very gifted..... I really just wanted to say that, that's all. |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
As of yet, this is my favorite. I believe your sir Walter Scott style of writing(which I do not know what it is really called, but this reminded my of his writing in Lady of the Lake) is beautiful. Such a sorrowful piece but elegant in it's composure. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
How baroque...how beautiful. This is timeless. Isn't it funny how pain seems to breed such beautiful poetry? I don't think a single thread of happiness can compare to the power of pain. |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
This is really good. I have yet to find a poem of yours I didn't love. One touch of nature makes the whole world kin. -William Shakespeare |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Liz - I literally wrote this one with my eyes closed as it poured from my soul - can relate totally... Rebecca - My deepest thanks - but sit down already! Red, Indeed, "that is ALL that matters" in my eyes. Sharing my poetry would serve me no purpose otherwise. I thank you so much for replying. jbowie, That is quite a humbling comment. My sincerest thanks...not sure what the name for it is either but it is the most comfortable style for me to write in as well. Robert, I couldn't agree with you more on the pain thing... It's powerful, indeed. So glad to see you posting again...welcome back. angel girl, I hope it's always that way. Thank you all so much, Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-09-2000).] |
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