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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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Let Down ~First Knight~ My heart can not bear, of not being there. Just sitting by your side. It rings so true, the words I miss you, Just hoping you've not lied.. You said it was right, only just last night, my feelings in such despair. Tears in my eyes, feelings oh that rise, and it just does not seem fair. What can I do? I don't have a clue, of how your feeling inside. I'm lost in space, an utter disgrace, now with feelings that I've died. There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent poem First_Knight. The image of you sitting alone wanting her is incredibly vivid. Might I ask exactly what prompted this poem, if it is not too personal? I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
The poem is about meeting someone who you love. You know when you want to see them each day. And one day they don't show up and your are not sure if it was something you said...or failed to say. It's that sitting there wondering....that loss. Being alone, Crying. There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Ok, thanks  I wasnt sure and didn't want to jump to any wild conclusions. The poem makes more sense (to me at least) now that I know to what you were referring I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ahh my friends always jump to conclusions too fast. They always seem to think that they have been put aside or they have done something wrong. How do you know she didn't have server problems or the chat program failed to log her on or she was called away to work or an emergency. I know that my server was down the other night, that could have been her problem as well. You never know these things. Why suffer such pain when you do not have the answers? (Just my thoughts... ) |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Mistikman. And Lady Marilyn...no conclusions ...Just expressions < !signature-->There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. [This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 02-09-2000).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
It's so hard when you are left to fill in the blanks...  ) Hang in there... )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Ah....an understanding soul.....thank you Breathe There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David- I like the way you wear your heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
First knight I think you're down but not out. A little patience would give her heart some time to discover, does she love you or is she longing for another. And your heart could use a little time too and give this romance a chance to come to you. (laugh) A very enjoyable poem, James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David, It wasn't that she didn't want to be here, but rather that she wasn't online at all last night due to the fact she slept only about 1 1/2 hours all day and was sick. But....you could have e-mailed her, I'm sure she would have appreciated hearing from you one way or another. This makes me rather sad, because it seems it's okay for you to lose contact for days at a time and her, only one night  We must not jump to conclusions, it hasn't served either of us well in the past Ruth |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
Things are never as bad as our thought`s make them out to be. I hope everything works out ok for you. Good Luck Today is the first day of the rest of your life. |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
A sweet poem, but I think she's just trying to catch up on sleep after she's been on-line chatting to you constantly! Either that or she's catching up with her girlfriends (and we all know how many questions they ask!!) Fingers crossed, you'll be okay!  [This message has been edited by jascanvey (edited 02-09-2000).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
David Things will work themselves out for you two...patience and understanding- lovebirds, and all will be well!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Im just not going to touch this one with a 10 foot pole LoL Did Jesus laugh? I think He did, 'cause He was once a little kid; and all of us were made with joy both sugar-spice girl and snake-snail boy! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
David what a beautiful poem but so sad you wrote this so well, the pain can be great can't it but it makes us stronger in time. Tracie |
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