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Artur Hawkwing
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0 posted 2000-01-12 10:51 AM


O gold in the mountains
twas the clouds sheen
and sparkling sunlight gold;
dry mountain, white river
quiet shadows dancing upon grass
as the high clouds drift past-
ancient as memory,
sweeter than honey,
but yet only one wonder
of the earth's creation;
good-bye, mountains,
but something like crystal
shining fragments crashing slowly
and as thunder upon the vale;
a secret message
but not "open sesame",
glittering against the water
in colors of multi-truth
called a rainbow;
the water sings
night and day, without end,
from heights so bold
plunging down
so far
and singing,
"come and see why
the fish live…today,"
from the waterfall;
farther out,
sand swirls and a wrathful sun
beats on the cactuses,
vultures circle
in the cloudless sky,
looking for sovereign
scrap meat…
where the river dies,
on that day long ago,
the sand rolls
over colossal ruins
where mummies buried
and soldiers perished
in ancient times;
time is ever-fleeing,
the desert mocks me;
now, in the wild,
where dark is more than light,
under canopies wide
under trees numerous,
where dark creatures dwell
fantasies reign
rivers and streams are dangerous,
snakes dwell everywhere
in brambles, around branches,
tribes mysterious live
in secluded spots
making great use of rivers-
and the abundant oxygen
from the jungle trees;
time to time,
light will shine beautiful
on green plants,
greener than any on earth;
and on grass dry,
where rain is few and shadows are deep
and the wind blows forevermore
as the ocean roars nearby
clouds deep and dark
with rain sweep the drylands
streams light as crystal
and pure as sunlight
run in this lonely land;
wild beasts lurk
agile on their feet, the cheetah,
eyes hungry, yet fearless;
a summer of crystals
in this land-desert
where laughter is soon gone
as the wind goes.


[This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 01-12-2000).]

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Ted Reynolds
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1 posted 2000-01-12 11:04 AM


Wow, Hawkwing, I'll need some time to catch my breath after THAT!  Quite a read!  Thanks for the experience.
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2000-01-12 11:10 AM


Artur,
This read is an experience, a treasure of color. I enjoyed.

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 2000-01-12 12:18 PM


You paint a lovely and vivd picture here  
Mike
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4 posted 2000-01-12 12:55 PM


Well done.  Enjoyed this fine effort.
Artur Hawkwing
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5 posted 2000-01-13 02:52 PM



I've been away and unable to check the responses. But thanks. Nice compliment there, Ted!  

Severn
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6 posted 2000-01-13 04:14 PM


K - this was like walking through a lovely land of words. Well done my friend - give yourself a big pat on the back for this.

K

Ted Reynolds
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7 posted 2000-01-13 04:15 PM


You earned it.
Denise
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8 posted 2000-01-13 06:42 PM


I agree! Very beautiful painting here!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



Nan
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9 posted 2000-01-13 09:26 PM


Well, lookee what the wind blew in.. and in fine style, I might add...
RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
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10 posted 2000-01-13 09:31 PM


I see Gold has returned, welcome back..

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


Rus Bowden
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11 posted 2000-01-13 09:45 PM


Hi Artur,

Such a landscape, so bleak and fiece with such a sense of ancient wonder and mystery, a sense of being forsaken, challenged, and glimmers of hope.  Your language is excellent with trusted in vision.  Excellent read!

Rus

Alwye
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In the space between moments
12 posted 2000-01-13 10:43 PM


Definitely a vision and an experience to behold.  What a grand and lovely journey you've taken us on.  Wonderful work.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
13 posted 2000-01-13 11:08 PM


Thank you for allowing me to live this vast vision, Artur -- it just swept me along like the wind over the drylands.  Breathtaking.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30
Posts 444
USA
14 posted 2000-01-14 04:36 PM


To everyone: Beautiful responses, I loved them!
Severn- I will my friend.
Ted- Nice compliment once again.
Denise- Thanks!
Nan- Thanks Nan.  
RainbowGirl- Gold? I have never been called that before but I like it. Thanks.
Rus- My friend that is a terrific, terrific analysis. I keep those in mind as I write.
Alwye- Wonderful, my friend!  
Skyfyre- I really like both of your names. Thanks once again for the comments. They mean so much to me.

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
15 posted 2000-01-14 04:49 PM


Thank you for the wonderful trip. I was sorry when it ended
Great poem
Liz

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