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Acrostic apology |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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The Masks We Wear Fragile, the soul; a thing of breath and dreams – Of tenderness and tireless hoping spun – Revealed to few, and trust is doubly rare. Guarded by walls, a sight but seldom won, Interred behind defensive masks we wear: Visions of strength, of cold oblivion, Elusive ghosts, for naught is what it seems. Merry the dance, though ponderous the tone, Ebullience so strange and out-of-place; Mirthful and gay, a parody of health – Yet there, between the cracks of painted face, Fluttering shadows of the timid self Retreating to the solace of the space Inside unmoving features carved of stone. Ephemeral within the lifeless clay, Never so confident to brave the light Defended, though alone, behind the wall That guards the shade from accidental sight. Hermit unwilling, but the masque is all -- Each breath confirms that only Dark is right -- Memories yet unhealed of brutal Day. A gesture made, an unexpected friend Suspicions rise, but just as quickly flee; Kinship is found in such a distant heart In miles, though nearer in camaraderie. With careful hesitance, the curtains part -- Entrusting truth where once was fantasy -- And even hopes to find a happy end, Regretting only past reticency. < !signature--> You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 01-03-2000).] |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I love the style used here. I have used it myself. About its content i was most intrigued and I am hoping to get the chance to read more from you |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Truly one of the best I have read my friend.  We all wear masks even to ourselves. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Excellent piece, Kess. I am awed by the depth of this one. Wonderful job. Michael |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Finely crafted! "Yet there, between the cracks of painted face, Fluttering shadows of the timid self" ...true artistry. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is fantastic, Kess! Expertly crafted! Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Expertly done, Kess, and very meaningful. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I think it revealing. An interesting reflection of the intellect that created it. Very nice work. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very beautiful, indeed Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nicely done acrostic Kess...the words are deep as the heart they come from. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Vividly painting a picture of friendship found through doubt, you have rendered before mine eyes a masterpiece. I have no doubts whatsoever that should forgiveness be somthing that were required, you would doubtless be the exception, and your friend would grant it. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
To all that took the time to read and reply -- thank you. Bojopy: so far as content goes, this is simply an apology to a friend with whom I was not entirely honest at the start. Glad you enjoyed, and I will do my best to give you more to read. Dream -- you know that your opinion in the matter of my poetry means much to me; thank you for a most high compliment. Michael: I am glad that you enjoyed; if this seemed to be a bit more heartfelt than most of my poetry that's because it was! Meadowmuse (love the name) -- you have singled out two of my favorite lines.  Denise, Balladeer -- it is gratifying to be called expert by the experts!  Rebel: Indeed it is -- if not revealing then at least depicting a revelation ... Elizabeth: Thank you so much! Ruth: Deep? That is indeed high praise -- my depths are filled with shadow but one might occasionally find a treasure! Thank you for your time and reply.Christopher: Indeed I have been forgiven. Thank you for the compliment. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I must agree with Ruth, this is defeinitely deep. Truly wonderful!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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