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Jack Frost (A sonnet?)
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Jack Frost (A sonnet?) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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OK, so I've studied my iambics, but I'm not going to call this poem a sonnet - but is it? Jack Frost Who is the one who paints December's sight Of winter's frozen mist upon the blade That settles down like crystal powder light And clings to every leaf where it is laid Who wakes my eye again in April's morn And tries once more the winter to entice By whisp'ring on the dew of which it's born To make a frosted coat of purest ice Who places whitened icing on the grass The frozen sugar threatening bloom to kill And then when sun awakes removes it fast Hence, sparing once again the daffodil The blessed hand of God was never lost To one that we refer to as "Jack Frost" Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-01-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful, Elizabeth....and just one syllable away from a perfect sonnet (the last line has one too many). The poem is great. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I don't know if it's a sonnet Liz, I just know that it is a poem that I like, like everything you write. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Almost perfection, Elizabeth! (check your email) Denise |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Very nice. I love Jack Frost. Very lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks everyone, Iambic phrase by any other name Would more than likely still become my bane I'm getting there. Thanks for the help Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you Denise for the tips Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You're welcome, Elizabeth! This is truly beautiful and sings like a song! I love it! Denise |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, better late than never....  It looks to me that your revisions have perfected this wonderful piece - I like it a lot.... Hm.. What can we ask of you next??? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks, Nan for your help. You are the teacher, so I'll just wait for the next assignment. I'm among some great poets here, and have learned so much. Liz |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I could care less if it's a sonnet besides, anything you right is brillant! Nathan |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is exquisite! The visions, which I can see in my mind's eye, and the message. Wow, can you paint pictures with words! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wow! Nathan, what a nice compliment! I'm blushing Liz Rosemary, So glad you liked this little sonnet Thank you so much for your kind comment LIz |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Quite beautiful! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Lovley poem Liz but then all of your work is so Wonderful and so good  Julie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks, Echo and Whiskey. I edited that disturbing last line Liz |
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