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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

0 posted 2000-02-02 01:16 PM

I find myself in rolling hills,
...as spring is in the air,
Reflecting on a life to be,
...with mate I soon will pair.

A rising sun from out the east,
...spreads forth its warming glow,
As up ahead a slender oak;
...beside a stream doth flow.

I've never been this way before,
...no path to lead the way,
As walk along this nameless stream,
...and greet the coming day.

Beneath oak's limbs, white patch of snow,
...remains of winter past,
Protected by tree's greening boughs,
...within its shadows cast.

I stop to rest beside small oak,
...and gaze in awe around,
At the beauty of the hills;
...feel nature's grace abound.

I know within, the time will come,
...before our final day,
My loving wife, within my arms,
...beneath oak tree will lay.

Reprise:

I walk along a flowing stream,
...so small it has no name,
No footprints in the sand ahead,
...and none from whence I came.

On distant hill the columbine,
...beneath the setting sun,
Many miles I've walked alone,
...soon will my day be done.

Up ahead a speading oak,
...lies just beyond the bend,
With weary legs I seek its shade,
...my journey will then end.

Beneath the boughs of beauteous tree,
...she lies in peaceful sleep,
I placed her there so long ago,
...so God would ever keep.

I made a bed amongst the leaves,
...and lay her gently there,
Held her close in love's embrace,
...last touched her silken hair.

A nameless stream flows down the hill,
...beside majestic tree,
Beneath its boughs we sleep tonight,
...for all eternity.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-02-2000).]

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-02-02 01:20 PM

You are certainly the romantic Mike! Sooooo beautiful!

Denise

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2000-02-02 01:37 PM

Oh Mike, I got goose bumps when I read this--the idea is so romantic and I love the time changes --the beginning and end, just wonderful!

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

3 posted 2000-02-02 01:45 PM

Romantic, well, yes, and so provokingly saddening. Your poetic eloquence in this piece is superb, Mike. The gentle meter lends itself to the tenderness, the nature of life and death, so keenly aware of one another, symbolized here with such grace. It is beauty, personified.

Claire

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

4 posted 2000-02-02 06:01 PM

Receiving these comments from three writers as gifted as you three are is high compliment indeed.
I sincerely thank you.

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2000-02-02 07:31 PM

Oh Tim...you left me speachless. Beautiful. *sigh*

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2000-02-02 07:33 PM

Oh, Mike-

This is just the tenderest love story.
How great the heart that went into this one.
A talent to be envied.
I will certainly be drawn to this one
again and again.

I really liked the symbolism of the
'slender' oak ... then the 'spreading' oak to show the passage of time.

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

7 posted 2000-02-02 10:20 PM

Thank you so much for your gracious comments Marge and Marilyn.... glad you enjoyed.

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

8 posted 2000-02-02 11:55 PM

This was magnificent -- a story subtly and superbly rendered. True poetry.

--Kess

Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...

--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

9 posted 2000-02-03 02:07 AM

A wonderful poem, lyrical, perfect rhythm, it sang as a melodic, romantic lullaby. Very well done, Mike
Liz

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

10 posted 2000-02-03 10:17 AM

Mike...this is both wonderful (in the literary sense) and oh so sad. I sit here both in awe and with tears in my eyes after having read it.

Have you ever noticed
That the words...
"Goodbye"
"I'm sorry"
"I love you"
Are so easy to pronounce
...Yet so hard to say
~Javan

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