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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
DelugeA fleeting flood of passion sounds from lovers' longing lips displayed against a tarnished moon a sonnet, soon eclipsed. A lasting, languid lullaby a mournful, solemn song a boundless buoyant joyful cry a weakened pulse, grown strong. The honest ache, the merging moan the tense taut fingertips We find each other, far from home as wind and water whips. Shared silence, it is finally ours a mirthfully magical hymn as words cascade from shadowed showers and bathe our hearts within.  Claire |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Wow~ The words do flow, so beautifully~ Your writing is exquisite~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
What beautiful phrasing, I enjoyed this a lot. ~Gene |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
mariee66...thank you for reading and letting me know what you think! Glad you liked. u~gene...thank you for the "beautiful" comment. (o: Claire |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Mmmmmmm.... like the feel, the flow, the sounds... very nice work. Wish I could say I wrote it... glad you did and shared. Peace to you lady in the meadow. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Andrew...thank you, and peace as well, to you. Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Again I bow to the goddess of poetry. How awe-struck I am by your talents. Liz |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"A lasting, languid lullaby a mournful, solemn song" Caught my eye, and is likely to stick with me for some time. Ethreallicaly, (is that a word???) beautiful! Lovin this!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Elizabeth...it is a bow from myself to you, as well, as I do admire your work so much. Thank you for reading this one. Christopher...thank you for letting me know you enjoyed this piece. Oh, and if that's not a word, it certainly should be, shouldn't it?  Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, this is lovely and sensual and full of grace. What a pretty picture, both. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
'Cascading'indeed. What a buoyant ride your words take in this poem. Flowing so gently. Lovely, Claire ... simply lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie...thank you. I always appreciate your feedback so much. Marge...thanks for reading and for the sweetened "loverlies" you sent. Claire |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
This is very sweet in a longing sort of way. I liked it very much. Bravo! G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Claire, your words always seem to flow so beautifully. As I can see from my first glimps much like the poet herself... Hmmmmmm. Parker |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
G...thank you for reading and the kind, perceptive comment...yes, it was written from an ardent and intense plane of longing. Parker...thank you. Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Claire, this has got to be one of the most romantic poems I have ever read! *sigh* Well done! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, thank you. I take your comments to heart, and appreciate your reading. Claire |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
With voice of golden nightengale, She sings her words of love, Surely not a mortal be, But goddess from above. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A stirring verse you've penned for me, symphonic satin sound. A thank you should I send to thee but words cannot be found. Thus I shall merely bow my head in quiet peaceful pleasure for poet's praises have I read and ever shall I treasure. Thank you, Mike. Claire |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very lovely words that flow through your fingers |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Claire this is so beautiful, and the flow WoW, I am going to miss your wonderful poetry, email me some every now and then ok? *hugs* I'll miss you, take care! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
I must say that this is the best poem that I've read in here. You are truly talented. Koon- |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Hoot Owl....thank you, I appreciate your thoughts Echo...thank you, I would be happy to send you some of my work but ONLY if you promise to reciprocate! (hee hee!) Take care, dear one, and put me in your address book! Koon...wow, thank you for your kindness. I'm glad you liked this! Claire |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this is splendid says me oh yuh i shall search you out from now on i twill |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thanks, Walt. I'm not too hard to find. Just look for the woman with her heart on her sleeve. (I'll be the one right beside her rifling through the dog~eared "Emotion to English Translation Dictionary" and scribbling furiously on the inside cover of an ancient copy of "The Guide to Rational Living") |
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