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Untitled.........any ideas????
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin 
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20 yrs of keeping it inside. Now, I can't hide I'm afraid of the shrink Afraid of what you think Why did I keep it secret for so long When I was weak You would have been strong Holding me close When I needed it most I can't change the past Forever inside it will last So many questions you must have Are you afraid to ask? I opened the box the other night Opening it to the pain it held tight Exposing it to the light Locked away years ago Buried down deep below Never planning to tell another soul But some how it escaped Leaving me in this state Feeling so drained My head reliving the past Please tell me this won't last Telling me it not my fault But holding it in my secret vault. |
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Anne Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 78 |
I've got it! "Pandora's Box"? Something about Pandora? Maybe? I dunno  Great poem! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
How about "Secrets" It is very nice I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary insanity. |
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin |
Thanks for the ideas Anne & First Knight |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Cheryl. Full of inner pain and turmoil. Well done. I'm at a loss as to another suggestion for a title....other than maybe...'Exposed' Denise |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
I feel your pain through this even though I have no idea what it is all about. Illusive Cage Turmoil Released Pain Contained Persistent Past I don't know this was fun but I have FAITH you will figure it ALL out. |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
"If I only knew"...(maybe) wonderful poem |
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin |
Denise Thanks Paul I know it's not clear what it is about. So I will tell. I was molested when i was 10. Thanks for your ideas on a name for it One Thanks |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"Releasing the past" Conveyed your feelings well! This poem leaves you feeling the expression! Well done! DH |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
How about "Truth Unmasked" Such sorrow deep within. I felt it in your verse, well written Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dolphins3- 'Vaulting'would be my choice- you have vaulted leaps and bounds over an obstacle that many have stumbled on. Good for you to release it. God bless. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin |
Thank you very much Danny, Elizabeth and Marge. Through the pain . I still remain. |
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