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My First Poem -- Things at Last
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My First Poem -- Things at Last |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
This is my first poem. I just hope this doesn't seem childish. I have no background in poetry, so please understand that I know nothing about correct formatting or punctuation (need a lot of help there). I just want to know if I have any talent for this or if I'm just hallucinating. I wrote this last night. ---- "Things at Last" There are things I’ve yet remembered, Places that I’ve been before. Faces seem familiar, But people have changed, They’re here no more. For, there is no Present There is no Past, But only the becoming Of Things at Last. There are times, That seem to pass me by. I can’t recall, I don’t know why. For, there is no Present There is no Past, But only the becoming Of Things at Last. But now it seems so clear to me, The present is the future of the past. And the Future is those Things at Last. For, there is no Present There is no Past, Lest I forget to remember, Those Things at Last. ---- Thanks, Gene |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gene- Surely you jest ! Hallucinating? NOT ! Welcome again to the hearth of this family of friends. Thanks for the log you've added to the poet's fire. The poem is very well done. 'The present is the future of the past'. Took me a minute .... but I got it ! Very thought-provoking indeed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! What a beautiful, delightful poem! Welcome to Passions, Gene! Check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
Musical, Gene, completely musical! A much better entrance into the forum. Far from hallucinating...looking forward to reading more.  Sherry "Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Wow! Thanks all. I'm inspired.  --- Gene |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Eugene, I think that this is a great poem, and I am glad you decided to post it here for all of us to read and share in its beauty! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I can say that you're definantly NOT hallucinating..I remember my first poem- way back when, and I'm sure it wasn't this good. Your format and rhyme is very good- And you call yourself a beginner????  Welcome to passions!!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Thanks again. I just wanted to say, that I really appreciate this forum and all of you for your wonderful thoughts and poems. You don't know how much they mean to me. I'm stuck in a very high-tech job. Don't get me wrong, I love what I do, but everyone I work with are scientists or engineers. They do great things, but sometimes can't see the forrest for the trees. If they knew that I'm writing poetry, they'd think I've gone off the deep end--they'd never let me live it down. I've always been more the "artsy" type, so it's nice to be able to take a relective break and come to a place where my thoughts are welcomed. I find this very therepeutic. I hope I can continue to think of new poems. Whenever I do, I'll be sure to post them here. Thanks so much, Gene  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Gene, Its a wonderful poem, a great first start, you are a natural. I'm also in a high tech job, and I show my poetry. I don't care what they think, cause they can't write poetry na na na na. ... Sorry slipped back into my childhood. Oh yes, Welcome. parker |
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