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Stargazer
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since 2000-01-21
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Alvordton, OH USA

0 posted 2000-01-21 11:35 PM


Your voice
can shatter hearts
and it soothed against mine
mending the breaks
and restoring my faith in you
every word so thought out
but filled with your bold heart
and completely spur-of the moment
you feed my heart
the vicious monster that it is
and make me want to sing
you reach for me
and your voice leads the way of your hand
smoothing against my cheek
before your skin comes near
you seduce me
through a mere breath
and your touch
is only an added bonus
for I am yours
before you can place your brand upon me
and I cannot leave
though my body is free
not chained down
my mind is captivated
by the taste of your voice.




[This message has been edited by Stargazer (edited 01-21-2000).]

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simplyYRREHS
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 162

1 posted 2000-01-22 12:32 PM


Welcome, stargazer!  Nice writing.  I smiled even more imagining it as "Type" in place of the "Voice" in your poem.  Interesting.  The last line would read, "...by the taste of your type". Thanks for the smiles.

Sherry

WolfsMate
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 121
New York
2 posted 2000-01-22 04:40 AM


Soft and sensual. Enjoyed the read
d.schultz
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 43

3 posted 2000-01-22 08:44 AM


Very Sensual......  I agree very nice reading  
Nan
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4 posted 2000-01-22 08:53 AM


You've some very nice sentiments here, stargazer... Welcome to Passions - We look forward to reading more of your work... Check your email...
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-01-22 09:08 AM


StarGazer-

A very nice entrance onto the
stage of Passion's.  
A bouquet to you.

~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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6 posted 2000-01-22 03:36 PM


Welcome to Passions, Stargazer! This is beautiful!

Denise

Anne
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since 1999-12-31
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7 posted 2000-01-22 07:53 PM


Loved that last line!  Well done!
Paul Hoekman
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since 1999-12-28
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Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>
8 posted 2000-01-22 08:16 PM


Breath Taking!
I really enjoyed
your first post.
Welcome!
Look forward to
reading many more.

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