The Rain has been Spun through Her Hair

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The Rain has been Spun through Her Hair

j0n4th4n
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since 2003-03-11

Posts 94

0 posted 2003-10-11 06:36 PM

if you dont know the word 'newsagent' in the usa (or anywhere else) it means that type of shop which sells newspapers, magazines, cigarettes, sweets (candy) etc

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The rain has been spun through her hair
like a splatter of reminder of february,
when she entered the shop -
I was there buying cigarettes for some
mere child outside (how noble of me)
when i caught sight of her enter the doorway
for an instant she stopped and stared into
newsagent nothingness, and I looked at
her, my dear friend, innocent of
the dangers her heart would soon face,
but her brave face shone through into
that vaguely neareastern-feeling place (does
the foreigness of the owners affect a
shop?) and mundane
brightness of the lights
lit her and peeled layer after layer of
clouded-over sight from my eyes
or winter indulgence from her beauty
and I saw, for the first time perhaps
my true revealed love, my destiny, even if
a short one..
yes, at that my soul wanted to kiss
her, even though my mouth didn't know it
to kiss my dear friend, to kiss her, how
thereafter it seemed obscene and wonderful.......

[This message has been edited by j0n4th4n (10-11-2003 06:39 PM).]

j0n4th4n
Member

since 2003-03-11

Posts 94

1 posted 2003-10-14 04:00 PM

i have a problem - can any one help? i cant decide what amount of punctuation i should use in poetry. i mean, should i punctuate it as if it were prose? and if not, then how little or much should i deviate?

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