every second in a minute
will count today
because the boys are off
to war this day

brother
please don't leave our mama in tears
she's beggin' for you to stay
becuase her only boy is off
to fight today

daddy
your little girl is screamin'
:my daddy, oh he can't be leavin':
she's sobbing for her daddy today
because her daddy's never comin' back they say

husband there
your wife's got baby inside
he'll be born the day you die
the tears fell when he was shipped away
because her man went off to die today

the women will cry
and the man will lay
the world is to shame
the nations will blame
our boys are off to war today


_hey kids.please help me with this antiwar "song" i was asked to write.
i'd really appreciate constructive critism, something i can change, not snide remarks i've been reading lately. lol.
i do know that the rhyming is a bit forced, but that's the kind of help i'm looking for.  tighting it up and smoothing it out.
thanks a ton!
as always,
good day.
_rae