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raevynsbreath Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 64Mi, USA |
you've left your traces everywhere your shadow never falls on the same place twice your paintings still sit by the door your tally marks still carve the wall the dishes are stacked just as high your smell still lingers in the curtains your wet towels are damp on the floor your empty beer bottles clutter the tables your vomit still sticks to the couch i've left my heart shattered across the room the pieces are sharp, they sting i've left the cat to feed herself the food is all over the kitchen my clothes still fill the only closet all blue, black, neatly stained my camera is in pieces on the bathroom tile the pictures of you still haunting every room so much love/hate trust/lies history here i wonder who'll want it now the apartment is such a mess this is just some free writing i did last night.just wondering what it sounds like. thanks and good day. _rae |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
that touched to close to home...very good write! i know exactly how you feel Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Cytten Junior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 16Canada |
wow it sounds like somthing of a fight between you and your boyfriend or girlfriend.It sounds to me like he did somthing and you drove him out of your life but not realizing it want him back. |
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raevynsbreath Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 64Mi, USA |
thanks. but it's not experience. it's my imagination. hehe. |
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